you will not learn much about life if you are always comfortable
The sense of being comfortable is one of the things we are always seeking. We spend lots of our time to work for being able to have a more comfortable life. But, does being comfortable has any disadvantage too? Can we learn enough if we do not have any hard situation in our life? In my view, it is not good to be always in the best situations, sometimes, we need to spend some period of times with hardship to learn about real world. I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First, by being comfortable we cannot see all aspects of life. I had a happy childhood and I grew up in a wealthy family. Every time I wanted something new, like a doll or a clothes, my parents bought me. I had a very comfortable life and did not know how does it feel to not be a rich person. Three years ago when I was in the last year of bachelor’s degree, I met a girl who was exactly look like me. Some people even were saying that we are twin; we were really look like each other. But we had a big difference; she did not have a wealthy family and had to work to pay for her tuition. When I knew that girl more and more, I realized how precious life I had. I never had this chance to pay attention to my wonderful life, because I was always thinking that the life will always be like this. But when I put myself in the shoes of the girl, I could see how much hard my father works to make a happy and comfortable life for us. After I saw how it is like to not have a comfortable life, I did not blame my father for working too much and appreciated him each single day. This just happened when I imagine how does the life is, if I do not have a comfortable life.
Second, by having a happy life you cannot learn by doing. Those children who grow up in a wealthy family and always had a comfortable life, do not need to work very hard. They have almost all the things they need, or at least they can ask their parents to buy them the things they need. In the other hand, when you do not have a comfortable life, it means you must work really hard to make life a little bit easier for yourself and your family. You need to know different skills and also you must know how to sell your skills in a way which other people pay for your skills eagerly. I have an independent friend who works really hard and does not get any money from her family, so the life is sometimes uncomfortable for her. She knows how to draw and cock really well and she learned all these skills to have a chance to compete with others and sell her paints and foods for a better price. In contrast, I never had a hard life so I did not need to learn so many skills. I never learned how to draw or cock by doing them, because, I was thinking I will never ever need this art. Being uncomfortable forces you to learn many skills and it is a chance which people who have a comfortable life never get it.
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, we must do our best to make the life easier for ourselves and our family, but it worth to mention that, being uncomfortable can sometimes make some unique opportunities for you that people with a comfortable life never find. So to sum up, I believe by being comfortable we cannot learn very much. At least we cannot learn about how real life is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a (clothes)' or simply 'clothes'?
Suggestion: a (clothes); clothes
... I wanted something new, like a doll or a clothes, my parents bought me. I had a very com...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'looked'.
Suggestion: looked
...;s degree, I met a girl who was exactly look like me. Some people even were saying t...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'looked'.
Suggestion: looked
...saying that we are twin; we were really look like each other. But we had a big diffe...
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Line 3, column 1132, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...ppened when I imagine how does the life is, if I do not have a comfortable life. ...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ou must work really hard to make life a little bit easier for yourself and your family. Yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, well, at least, in contrast, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 98.0 43.0788530466 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 644.0 407.700716846 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.11180124224 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0375743251 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30686607975 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.388198757764 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4038284688 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4193548387 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7741935484 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330341777839 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967885458009 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765669510684 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212469961383 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489106564039 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.56 10.9000537634 60% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.76 8.01818996416 72% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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