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If you do not make sure other people know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never be successful in life.

It goes without saying that success is one of the most important goals of humans. There has been a controversial debate among people seeking success as to whether other people's information about them influences their achievements. From my perspective, success is not related to others' information about our qualifications, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, when bosses or employees are not informed about our accomplishments, we will be able to focus on desired purposes. It is not a secret to anyone that intervention is one of the worst drawbacks to be successful since it puts a lot of pressure on our shoulders. Knowing about qualifications, people being boss or employee will have enormous expectations from us, so it is more likely that we will be overwhelmed with anxiety which prevents us from concentrating on duties and responsibilities. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a university student, all my professors were aware of my high ability to learn quickly and they, therefore, expected me good scores during the course of study; unfortunately, I was stressed out since I did not want to disappoint my teachers. Enduring a lot of pressure during examination time, I could not focus on my answer and I got low grades. Had my professors not been informed of my abilities, I would have gotten higher scores. As you can see, it is not always a good motive to be known as qualified individuals since we will have difficulty controlling stress in decisive times.
Furthermore, without others' opinion and information about our talents, will be more satisfied with the living. It is crystal clear that confidence is the major factor to be successful because it gives motivation and power to make the most of our time and abilities in which we are able to flourish and facilitate the way that we are living. Acquiring this characteristic, people have many opportunities to be successful because doing activities when other individuals do not know about our strengths is much easier; we are able to recreate self-esteem and confidence since we are not afraid of being judge. As a result, we will escape from the clutches of failure. As you can see, doing tasks in private when others do not have any idea about our talents, we will boost our confidence, which is one of the vital traits of successful people; thereby we will be satisfied with the living.
In sum, not only will we are able to control our negative feelings and emotions, we will also enjoy the living since we have confidence.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ial debate among people seeking success as to whether other peoples information about them in...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 682, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...hey, therefore, expected me good scores during the course of study; unfortunately, I was stressed ou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, therefore, as to, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88045977011 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0186105268 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496551724138 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.1464993405 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.6875 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1875 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262926006594 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933200530218 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721518241963 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15643155992 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821733454999 0.0645574589148 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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