work with machines or people?
Choosing a job which you always like it is really hard. Most of the time, you do not know what can be an ideal job for you which you enjoy doing it for all your life. Some people prefer to work with machines; because, machines are silent and do not bother them; while, others prefer to work with people; because, they find it more interesting. In my view, occupations which I must work with people are better and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First, by working with people you can learn more. Last summer when I graduated in bachelor’s degree, I started my job as a quality control engineer in a food company. I had to be in a close connection with workers and explain lots of things to them. Each day I was trying to talk to them more and teach them more valuable information. I really liked my work because, I knew I can teach them all I know and help them to do their work better. But, this work had another advantage for me; I could learn so many new things which I never had a chance to learn them. One of our workers, who was a bilingual person, taught me mandarin which is the spoken language in china. If I had to work with machines, I could never find this chance to learn this lovely language and it is one of the reasons why I prefer occupations which I must work with people.
Second, working with people is more fun. I am a person who gets depressed easily, so I prefer to surround myself with people. When I was doing my project for master’s degree, I had to work with lots of machines and because I needed deep focus, I was working alone. Those days were one of the worst days I ever had. They were really boring and I think I will never ever put myself in this situation anymore. When I was doing something wrong, I did not have anyone around me to ask for a help, and as you know machines cannot give you a hand when you are in a big trouble. In my view, occupations which I must work with machines are really boring, and also I cannot learn a lot by working with machines. When I work with people, I can enjoy my time and also learn from people how to work better or faster.
To cut the long story short, I want to conclude that occupations which we can work with machines can sometimes be good; why so, there is no one who distract or bother you. You do not waste some part of your time by talking to people and you can put all of your effort on the work you do. On the other hand, occupations which we must work with people are more interesting and we can learn a lot more. When we work with other people we can see how hard people are working, and this can boost our motivation. To sum up, I am a person who prefers occupations which must work with people and based on my experience of working with machines, I think I will never ever try occupations which I must work with machines.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, while, i think, you know, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21167883212 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32106458936 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.39598540146 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0088371655 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.32 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.92 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4698497189 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172868160653 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153265070574 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362112943569 0.150856017488 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857273810704 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.14 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.44 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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