The people we work with have many different characteristics and all of them affect the quality of our time at work. Of the following, what do you think is the most important quality for a boss or supervisor to have?
-a serious attitude about their work
-a lot of related experience
-a tendency to always tell the truth
It is undeniable that the character of work's boss or supervisor affets the quality of our time at work. People in general have different characteristics, that in turn will affect others in either positive or negative way. Personally, I think that the most important thing to be available in my boss is to have serious attitude about their wrk. I feel this way for several easons, which I am going to explain in the following essay.
To begin with, I think that serious attitude is a prove of the professionality. Professional attitude will always benefit the employee, and that what people are looking for in any job. For instance, ten years ago, I was planning tobe a pharmacist, so whenever I looked for a job, I did it in the same field. I had a job as a pharmacy technician at a very popular company. my manager was very serious about the job, and she also was very professional. Consequently, he attitude affected my attitude. I became more serious about my career. In addition to that, her way of acting in the pharmacy helped me to be a good pharmacist in on of the leading hospitals in my country.
Second, I think that the employee is not concered about how many experience his or her manager has, because at the end of the day what is going to affect him or her is the boss evaluation for this employee. In response, a serious attitude from the manager will force all employees to be more accurate and more efficient in what they are doing. For example, back to my manager as a pharmacy technician, I remember that once she had to take a leave for almost a week, and another pharmacist came to cover her shifts. That pharmacist was an expert. He worked for many different pharmacies around the world, but he was not serious at all. We spent the whole week talking about his experiences. It was fun at the beginning, but at the end it affected our work. In fact, our evaluation for that week was the worst evaluation since the company opened.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the most important characteristic of supervisors is to be serious about their job. It is not only because it reflect the sense of professionality, but also it affect employees attitude and their evaluation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in fact, in general, talking about, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57868020305 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8369004792 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477157360406 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7559814095 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383437053144 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105411285742 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932858861275 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24222989397 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118093956025 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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