the travel to the mars and some probable problems astronauts may face to.

Essay topics:

the travel to the mars and some probable problems astronauts may face to.

The text discusses the possibilty of human's traverl to Mars and provides three reasons to states why it belives this mission is not possible. On the other hand, the professor goes against stated claims and by bringing some explanations describes why the travel to Mars is not impossible.

First, the text states that based on this point that this travel will last for two years, none of space vehicles have enough capacity to carry enough water, food and oxygen needed for this long trip. However, the professor refutes this claim and mentions that scientists can use hydroponic technique which provides enough food, water and oxygen for them. She continues that by using this method, astronauts can can grow plants inside the water and provide their needed food. Besides that, these plants can absorb carbon dioxide and convert in into oxygen. Moreover, these cultivated plants can recycle the water and change it into water vapor, which can be changed into drinking water. In this way she states why the capacity of space vehicles is not a reasons for counting the travel to Mars as an impossible mission.

Second, as the text, astronauts should spend a long period of time in zero-gravity situation which makes some health problems for them. In contrast, the professor states that astronauts by doing regular exercises can keep their body and muscles healthy. Moreover, they can take mineral pills like Calcium, which can assure their health. By this point, the professor refutes the claim of health problems made by the text.

Third, the text claims that astronauts expose to some dangerous space radiations emitted by the sun. It also includes that some shields which can be used as a protection add lots of weight to space vehicles, and it makes their use limited. The professor goes against this point and states that all space radiations are not dangerous. She also mentions that the only time sun produces harmful radiations is when it is in its active phase. We can also hear from her that astronauts will not face any problem when the sun is not emitting dangerous radiations. in addition, she bring this point that by using some small shelters, which do not add lots of weight to the vehicle, astronauts can protect themselves against probable harmful radiations.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
...s that by using this method, astronauts can can grow plants inside the water and provid...
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Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a reason' or simply 'reasons'?
Suggestion: a reason; reasons
...y the capacity of space vehicles is not a reasons for counting the travel to Mars as an i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...he text, astronauts should spend a long period of time in zero-gravity situation which makes s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 384, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mentions that the only time sun produces harmful radiations is when it is in its ...
^^
Line 7, column 559, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...n is not emitting dangerous radiations. in addition, she bring this point that by ...
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Line 7, column 576, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'brings'.
Suggestion: brings
... dangerous radiations. in addition, she bring this point that by using some small she...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, moreover, second, so, third, in addition, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 22.412803532 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 381.0 270.72406181 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99737532808 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39233050063 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482939632546 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.511536414 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.777777778 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158152902358 0.272083759551 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566645444847 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538672580041 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106231927296 0.162205337803 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370310102799 0.0443174109184 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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