Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing sports can teach people lessons about life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Group activities like sports are one of the most important activities which can teach people a lot. By doing these kind of activities, people can both enjoy of their time and learn about life and communication. In my view, sports can play a strong role in teaching people different lessons, and I would like to elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, People by playing sports realize how they can learn from their mistake. Real life like any sport is full of different situations with good, bad or mediocre results that can teach people a lot. By having a good analyze on mistakes, people can know their strengths and weaknesses, and realize how they can work to get better results. My own experience is a compelling example of this point. I started basketball at the age of ten. In the first years of my activity in this sport, I could get almost twenty scores for my team, and it leads to joining the national basketball team of my country, Iran. During the period that I was a teenager, I was really arrogant, but some of my failures thought me a lot. I learned that no matter how much good I am, I should always pay attention to my mistakes and learn from them. Playing this sport could teach me I am not the best in the world, and should not be very proud of myself. Based all wonderful things I learned from playing basketball, I think it can really help us to learn about life.
Second, playing sport teaches people how to do a good team work which is essential for their success in the real life. One of the main problems almost all the people face to, and is the result of their failures is the lack of knowledge of group activities. Playing sports can teach people how a great team can beat an unorganized team with great players, and it is one of the biggest lessons of life people can learn from sports. To bring an example I can mention to my sister. When she was a kid, she used to play solo sports, and did not like to participate in any group activities. Some years later, when she stablished her own job, she realized that no matter how much a person is good in a specific field, she cannot do all the things by herself, and that was the time when she started to learn about team works. I suggested her to play volleyball which can teach her a lot about group activities and group disciplines. As the result of playing this sport, she taught how to have strong team work, and could succeed in her career too. Her experience is another reason that I believe sports can teach us about life.
To sum up, we should not play sports just for having fun and spending our leisure time. By having a focus on the effects of sports on our lives, we easily realize that how much they role can be important in the life. The bottom line is that sports can show us how to convert our mistakes to victories, and also teach us how to communicate with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... which can teach people a lot. By doing these kind of activities, people can both enjoy of...
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Line 7, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...each us how to communicate with others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, i think, kind of, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40595903166 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35748453247 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415270018622 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9149896655 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.64 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.48 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.24 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314872732112 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104099672205 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788196320923 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219054575515 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508361125815 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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