Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Family is one of the most important part on each societies and if we have good families we can ensure a good society. It is all because family is the first group which we face to and learn so many things from its members. some people think it is important to have an extended family which all family members like grandparents, counsins and other family members are living together and think we still need to live in a big family like this, while others believe these days big families are needed less and having a big family is not as important as it was in the past. In my view, extended families are now less important than before and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
Firstly, people's attitude toward family has changed. some decades ago people liked to live together as a big family and it was really important for them because they could work together and overcome problems easier, but todays people just prefer to live alone or in a small family and it make the importance of big families less. For instance, when I was six years old, we were living in a big family and all my cousins, aunts and uncles were in a big house which we were in too. elders used to work together in our farm and it was a big help because we could have more fun during our work and it was easier to earn money by working as a team. But as time passed, all of us changed our attitude toward living together and prefered to separate and live in smaller houses far from each other. It was exactly the thing which happended for some of my friends too and I belive it was based on a trend in people's opinion toward family which made people to pay less attention to big families.
Secondly, life's cost has increased. Each day we see that inflamation in all societies increases and it makes the cost of life really more than before which can lead to having smaller and smaller families in societies. As time passes, some members of family can not work anymore and they will be just consumer and based on this point that the life's cost has increased in a crazy way, active members of a big family can not afford the cost of a big family's life. To bring an example I can mention to my own family one more time and say that when I became twenty years old, my father and uncles got retired and did not have the ability to work as hard as they did in the past. It was while all young members were really busy by their schools and universities and did not have time to work, also prices and cost of life were increased and we could not even pay our bills. So our family faced to a big financial problem and that was one of main reasons why we decided to separate and live as separate small families. I am sure it was something which happened for lots of families and forced them to break into smaller families and even prefer to have less children.
To cut the long story short, we cannot cast any doubt on importance of family and living by all family members, but based on presented justification, my conviction is that the extended families are less important now and we see less and less big families each single day. We can even predict that this trend will continue in future too and we may even see people who are living alone and even do not marry.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 40.0 13.8261648746 289% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2652.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 612.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33333333333 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20877805581 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393790849673 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 872.1 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.3174295331 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.578947368 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2105263158 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197582690765 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725507712792 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577542232013 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14181066151 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400134174887 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.43 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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