Busy parents have less time to spend with their children. Some people think time should be spent to play games or sports. Others think time should be spent by doing something together related to schoolwork
It goes without saying that parents’ role in their children’s lives is of a great importance. It is necessary for parents to dedicate time to their offsprings. However, nowadays since both the parents have to work in order to support the family properly, they do not have a lot of time to spend with their children. One question that may occupy the mind is that whether the parents should allocate the limited time they have to play with their children or help them with their homework. From my vantage point, It would be better for both parents and children to spend their time playing with each other. In the following essay, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons for holding this idea.
First, no one would doubt that playing has a significant role in children’s mental health, behavior, and the type of personality the might have in the future. It is an important part of every child’s life, through which they obtain a lot of experiences and they learn many things. It is crystal clear that the best teacher of each individual as a child is their parents. Hence, parents can use this opportunity to teach their children valuable lessons from which they can benefit in the future. An example drives this notion home. Nowadays, many developed companies like Japan has introduced special games to the parents to play with their children in their spare time. These games have been devised by a group of psychologists to make the children gain a lot of social skills. As a consequence, it has resulted in a better society. Had the pernts not played with their children, these outcomes could have never be obtained.
Second, playing with their children helps the parents to improve the quality of their relationships. By playing with the children, individuals would depict an impression of themselves as they are friendly and easy-going. Consequently, children would find their parents reliable and see them as a friend instead of someone who is ready to punish them. This relationship will be preserved and even improved more by playing until the children grow up. This is the time that a good relationship is more important than any time else because at this time young people are exposed to many dangers such as addiction, sexual diseases, and even depression. When the children have a good relationship with their parents they readily talk to their parents without concealing anything and the parents can give them advice which can help and even save them.
To wrap it up, I firmly believe that parents should spend time with their children and play with them. Although this time can be dedicated to helping the children do their homework, dedicating it to playing with them has more benefits as not only does playing affects children’s health and ensuing life, but also it will make the relationship between the parents and the children stronger. I myself would definitely spend time on playing with my children in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 924, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ildren, these outcomes could have never be obtained. Second, playing with their...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95991983968 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68659679486 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460921843687 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.031961013 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7916666667 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355088308386 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124528981106 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951055160218 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271587931161 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689176399576 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.