children over fifteen the right to vote
Some people suggest that affording children over fifteen the right to vote would lead to a
better society. After all, the more voices are heard in a democracy, the more legitimacy
elected leaders have. Be that as it may, I believe that society would actually be worse off if
fifteen-year-olds were allowed to vote. Teenagers are too immature to vote, and often simply
copy the preferences of their parents.
First and foremost, fifteen, is simply put, not very old. Children at that age lack the emotional
maturity needed to make intelligent decisions when voting. They often feel passionately about
a topic one day only to have their interest fizzle out the next; clearly , that causes problems
when the decisions made affect people throughout society. Moreover, fifteen-year-olds lack
the sophistication needed to distinguish between truly valuable causes and those that are merely exciting. Politicians would simply speak to the emotions of the younger voters during speeches, and teenagers might vote for frivolous policies, such as longer school vacations.
However, voting should not be taken so lightly—no choice, arguably, could be of more importance.
I also believe it would be a mistake to allow fifteen-year-olds to vote because they are likely to
simply copy the preferences of their parents. For example, during elections, voters are often
influenced by economic factors, such as promises to provide tax breaks, the expansion of
social aid programs. But fifteen-year-olds are not economically independent. Their financial
situations depend on those of their parents. For this reason, their parents would influence
them to vote to most help the family financially, which is not honest democracy. To make
matters worse, politicians would realize that families usually vote in the same way, and start
emphasizing policies helping families at the expense of other interest groups in order to get
their votes. For instance, politicians might promise to raise money for schools by taxing
businesses. This would effectively give parents a disproportionately large influence.
Essentially, there is a good reason that virtually no country on the planet allows people who
are so young to vote. They have yet to mature into responsible tax-paying citizens. As
mentioned, their interests are fickle, and not aligned with what is best for society as a whole. It
would be a mistake to give them influence in the democratic process.
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...agers might vote for frivolous policies, such as longer school vacations. Howeve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, after all, for example, for instance, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45833333333 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03185315949 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580729166667 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7053135061 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2727272727 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.53405017921 551% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230613892505 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657064068873 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102170883222 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0616094036544 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114726405421 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.