Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want Some people think this can cause bad habits and ideas about money in children Others think the opposite

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Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want.Some people think this can cause bad habits and ideas about money in children.Others think the opposite.

Currently, there is a heated argument on whether kids should receive a weekly allowance from their parents.It is not easy to make a decision without considering the reasons for both arguments and analysing the benefits of each option.Although some people hold an opposing view to this, actually, I think children receiving weekly pay in order to get themselves things is a good idea.My decision is based on the following reasons, which I will explore in my body paragraphs.

First of all,kids can always develop contentment when they receive money from their parents.To be more specific, when children do not get money from their parents they are likely to engage in bad act such as stealing.Moreover, they can go as far as breaking people’s home to steal their belongings.In contrast, receiving money from their parents make them develop self- contentment.Even though people try to entice them with attractive things, they are unlikely to be moved.My son and my neighbour are stunning examples of this.When my son was ten-years-old, I used to give him money to get some toys or rather get some biscuits and I discovered that he is always satisfied with whatever he gets from me.On one beautiful Saturday, my sister gave my son the sum of two hundred dollars but he refused.In fact, she was surprised and I had to tell her the reason which was the weekly pay he receives from me.Whereas, my neighbour’s daughter was sent home from school because she stole one of her classmate’s money.While the teacher was asking the reason she did that, she said her mum does not give her money to get snacks and as a result, she needed to steal.This example illustrates why parents should give their children pocket money.

What's more, one of the ways children can be brave and independent is when they receive money through their parents.To explain broadly, they can never be intimidated because they can always speak anytime.Even when accused wrongly, they can always defend themselves.For example, one of my friends took my son to her place for the mid term break.While my friend was leaving for work, she left the sum of a thousand dollars in her room without going with her key.On getting back come, she couldn’t find the money.So she asked my son and he told him he saw the housemaid when she entered the room.In fact, he was not scared, he said all this rightly in front of the maid.Therefore, my friend had to reward him because of his braveness.

In light of the reasons mentioned, I think kids should always receive pocket money from their parents.This is because it prevents them from practising illegal acts and it also serves as a way of increasing their self confidence.

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actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, i think, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90789473684 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84932481351 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517543859649 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 114.0 20.1344086022 566% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 375.460633755 48.9658058833 767% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 559.5 100.406767564 557% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 114.0 20.6045352989 553% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 37.75 5.45110844103 693% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 39.0 5.5376344086 704% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250158839243 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151204400303 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510947055827 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151204400303 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510947055827 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 58.7 11.7677419355 499% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -27.31 58.1214874552 -47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 45.4 10.1575268817 447% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.38 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.44 8.01818996416 155% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 47.6 10.0537634409 473% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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