Due to the benefits associated with video games, some believe that parents should allow children to play video games without any restriction. However, I disagree with allowing children to play video games freely. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will examine in the essay.
First, Addiction to video games causes the grades of the children to drop drastically. Video games are very addictive in nature, children, who don’t know their priorities tend to get addicted to them. Consequently, children play the games for long periods of time disregarding their studies. As a result, their academic performance will become poor. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in the 9th grade of high school, I was addicted to a video game called PUBG. I used to play the game very often whenever I get free time, and I didn’t take my studies seriously. As a result, my grades were very poor in the final examination, and I barely passed with minimum marks in the math subject. In addition, I also damaged my eyesight, so I must wear spectacles all the time. I am sure that if I had not played the game too much, I would have been able to get good grades in my final examinations.
Second, Children would often get into fights with others and can have serious injuries. Video games showcase a lot of violence, and violence often attracts children, so they get into fights with other children in their class or neighborhood frequently. Eventually, this leads to extreme and severe situations that could get out of hand and can cost lives. For example, my classmate, in Highschool, played a lot of video games that showcases extreme violence. Initially, he was very kind and gentle to fellow classmates, but he got influenced by the violence and started getting into fights with others, as it seems to be cool to him now. He would often incite violence inside the classroom and ends up hurting others badly. Once, the situation went out of control, he got into a fight with junior and made his nose bleed severely. As a result, the junior had to go through a minor surgery for his nose and had stitches on his face. Consequently, my classmate had to change school and his parents got a severe warning from the town’s executive sheriff. If video games don’t show such violent acts, severe incidents like this would happen very seldom.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion of banning video games for children. This is because video games degrade the child’s academic performance and encourage him or her into fights with their peers, often leading to disgraceful events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'classmates'.
Suggestion: classmates
...itially, he was very kind and gentle to fellow classmates, but he got influenced by the violence ...
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Message: The adverb 'seldom' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...e incidents like this would happen very seldom. In conclusion, I am of the opinion ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80623608018 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6247799516 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52561247216 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0335823785 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.32 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324727590158 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969354336 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996868758459 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222751291622 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659622152355 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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