Which viewpoint do you agree with? Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.
Some people argue that everyone in the world is influenced by advertisements in some way. Personally, I believe that advertisements only serve the purpose when the product meets the need of the people and improve the quality of life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, Advertisements help people to buy things, which are essential, but people are not aware of them. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. In my house, I have a big lawn with a large variety of trees and flowering plants. The flooring of the lawn is completely covered with grass. Every month, I must go through the very difficult task of leveling the grass by cutting it. Initially, I was using a manual cutter for the job. It takes me almost a day to do the job, and it also takes a heavy toll on my body for the next day. One day, I saw an advertisement about an automatic grass cutter, which works on electricity, and the only requirement it has is someone should hold it from behind. I immediately ordered it, since then I have been using it for cutting grass on my lawn. This reduced the burden for me. If it is not a useful product for me, I would have not purchased it. Thus, advertisements about a product are only fruitful when the product meets the requirements of the consumer.
Secondly, Advertisements make people aware of products that improve the quality of life. For instance, I like exploring new and adventurous places. I carry a lot of devices with me whenever I travel. Each of the devices has its own charger brick and power cord that I must always carry with me always. Once, I saw an advertisement about a universal charging hub that is useful for charging any device. I felt that it might be a very useful gadget for me, as I travel a lot, so I ordered it. I used it for quite some time. Now I don’t have to carry all the charging bricks with me all the time, which helped me to travel freely with less worry. Moreover, it helped me to buy less stuff, which helped me financially, as I need not spend money on things more often and made my expenditure more efficient.
In conclusion, although sometimes Advertisements promotes people to buy stuff which they don’t really need, I strongly believe that Advertisements are mainly making people aware of the latest advancements, which are very useful to improve people’s standard of living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...r cord that I must always carry with me always. Once, I saw an advertisement about a u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59027777778 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76961667648 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4275388827 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.32 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.28 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217950019183 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621017145448 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643954814548 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160597898499 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386808717104 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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