.Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not
need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may
improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer
Marketing strategies of the industry include advertising to offer their new product to a
wide range of possible costumers, but what is the real meaning of this radio or
television commercial campaigns, some people believe that this “commercial advice”
promote to acquire not necessary items, another group of population think that
those advertisements allow us to buy new product to improve our daily life.
In my opinion, I believe that advertisement encourage to buy product to improve our lives for
three main reasons: presenting new technological tools, easier ways how to make
the things and improving the result of routinary action.
First of all, advertisements present new products or new innovation
based in the application of technology and the result of experimentation with new
devices, is common watch on tv a commercial offering a new technological accessories for your house or a new tool with some innovation as not cable connection, use of Bluetooth ore some innovative changes that are necessary in our activities, for instance one years ago I presented
many problem with the organization of my computer, many cable were on my desk and was difficult to work efficiently, one day I was watching tv and a commercial advice about a keyboard and mouse connected by wireless persuaded me to buy those new implements, now my desk is in order with less cable and more technological tools.
Furthermore, the marketing strategy of new commercial products present new and innovative manner how to make everyday actions, that make it easier and allow less time wasted in home
tasks, for example the tv show that present this kind of products demonstrates all the ways how to use it and advices how to improve your activities, in my personal experience, when I cleaned my house I had many problems to get access to the small spaces under the sofa or the fridge, but with an advertisement related with a new cleaning tool they showed how to
use all the accessories of this product as a puzzle to get access to all kind of reduced and difficult spaces to maintain a cleaning house.
Finally, advertisers directs the message of the commercial campaign of new products based in the needs of the costumers to improve the result of their daily activities, offering more efficient and low cost form in basic action as painting, washing the car or making exercises, depending
of the product offered by the industry. The object is to focus the attention of population in how to reach better result in comparison with the use of older products, for example the offer of a new laptop of the same brand, that has more capacity to process information, more sophisticate programs or accessories that allow to improve the result of the user of this kind of products.
In conclusion, the advertisement as part of the marketing strategy of the industry not only allow to sell more products, for me, but the principal advantage of the advertisement is present
an opportunity to people to improve their life, with the acquisition of those products
costumer can get access to new innovation in technology to make the daily tasks
easier and spend less time on it, and produce better result of action in comparison
with the use of old tools.
.Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not
need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may
improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer
Marketing strategies of the industry include advertising to offer their new product to a
wide range of possible costumers, but what is the real meaning of this radio or
television commercial campaigns, some people believe that this “commercial advice”
promote to acquire not necessary items, another group of population think that
those advertisements allow us to buy new product to improve our daily life.
In my opinion, I believe that advertisement encourage to buy product to improve our lives for
three main reasons: presenting new technological tools, easier ways how to make
the things and improving the result of routinary action.
First of all, advertisements present new products or new innovation
based in the application of technology and the result of experimentation with new
devices, is common watch on tv a commercial offering a new technological accessories for your house or a new tool with some innovation as not cable connection, use of Bluetooth ore some innovative changes that are necessary in our activities, for instance one years ago I presented
many problem with the organization of my computer, many cable were on my desk and was difficult to work efficiently, one day I was watching tv and a commercial advice about a keyboard and mouse connected by wireless persuaded me to buy those new implements, now my desk is in order with less cable and more technological tools.
Furthermore, the marketing strategy of new commercial products present new and innovative manner how to make everyday actions, that make it easier and allow less time wasted in home
tasks, for example the tv show that present this kind of products demonstrates all the ways how to use it and advices how to improve your activities, in my personal experience, when I cleaned my house I had many problems to get access to the small spaces under the sofa or the fridge, but with an advertisement related with a new cleaning tool they showed how to
use all the accessories of this product as a puzzle to get access to all kind of reduced and difficult spaces to maintain a cleaning house.
Finally, advertisers directs the message of the commercial campaign of new products based in the needs of the costumers to improve the result of their daily activities, offering more efficient and low cost form in basic action as painting, washing the car or making exercises, depending
of the product offered by the industry. The object is to focus the attention of population in how to reach better result in comparison with the use of older products, for example the offer of a new laptop of the same brand, that has more capacity to process information, more sophisticate programs or accessories that allow to improve the result of the user of this kind of products.
In conclusion, the advertisement as part of the marketing strategy of the industry not only allow to sell more products, for me, but the principal advantage of the advertisement is present
an opportunity to people to improve their life, with the acquisition of those products
costumer can get access to new innovation in technology to make the daily tasks
easier and spend less time on it, and produce better result of action in comparison
with the use of old tools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2975.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 593.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01686340641 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93473315629 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95965898154 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435075885329 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 934.2 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 20.1344086022 293% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 239.886243874 48.9658058833 490% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 297.5 100.406767564 296% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.3 20.6045352989 288% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.3 5.45110844103 244% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.53405017921 573% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3795886268 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.231164618668 0.076458572812 302% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164450210251 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125667888235 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143409791319 0.0645574589148 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 11.7677419355 271% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 58.1214874552 20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 10.1575268817 259% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.0537634409 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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