People often move to a difference place, whether a town or a country, for a variety of reasons, such as doing business, persuaing their educaton, toursit, or even for compalsory reason like seeking asylum. Regarding these reasons, I do not agree with the statement that says people should not go to abroad just because they lose their friends.
To begin with, human kind naturally tends to move to different places because they will get bored living in a same place for their lifetime. Moving and visiting various places, releases them from a monotones life and changes their perception about the world. Of course, they will lose their old and best friends, howver, this is not a big deal. They shoudn't sacrifice their time to explore the world just becsue of thier friends. In fact, some times in our life, we need to replace people in different level so that it may pave the way for finding new people with different perspectives and values.
Furthermore, people always cannot simply stay at the same place for their lifetime. Some may go to a new country for following their business goals. Because it very usual that people do trades among countries and it requires them to often visit that country even settle there. Also, some people may move to a new country for persuing their education. Generally, US is estimated to be a great country for their outstanding education system. That's why thousands of students move to there just to start theri education. This is obvious that no one would ever give up on their dreams just for missing thier old friends. My expeience is a compelling example of this. In late 2019, I was accepted to a fellowhiop program in Japan. It was my first time I was going to a foreign country. I was very excited about. Even though it was difficult for me to leave my best friends, however, I was not eager to miss that unique opportunity for that reason.
In conclustion, huma kind often prefer diversiy in their life. I beleive that moving to a new place is an important thing in this purpose. Becasue going to new place, would defenitly change their views about the world and would make them think differently. Also, it is an opportunity to learn about different cultures.
People often move to a difference place, whether a town or a country, for a variety of reasons, such as doing business, persuaing their educaton, toursit, or even for compalsory reason like seeking asylum. Regarding these reasons, I do not agree with the statement that says people should not go to abroad just because they lose their friends.
To begin with, human kind naturally tends to move to different places because they will get bored living in a same place for their lifetime. Moving and visiting various places, releases them from a monotones life and changes their perception about the world. Of course, they will lose their old and best friends, howver, this is not a big deal. They shoudn't sacrifice their time to explore the world just becsue of thier friends. In fact, some times in our life, we need to replace people in different level so that it may pave the way for finding new people with different perspectives and values.
Furthermore, people always cannot simply stay at the same place for their lifetime. Some may go to a new country for following their business goals. Because it very usual that people do trades among countries and it requires them to often visit that country even settle there. Also, some people may move to a new country for persuing their education. Generally, US is estimated to be a great country for their outstanding education system. That's why thousands of students move to there just to start theri education. This is obvious that no one would ever give up on their dreams just for missing thier old friends. My expeience is a compelling example of this. In late 2019, I was accepted to a fellowhiop program in Japan. It was my first time I was going to a foreign country. I was very excited about. Even though it was difficult for me to leave my best friends, however, I was not eager to miss that unique opportunity for that reason.
In conclustion, huma kind often prefer diversiy in their life. I beleive that moving to a new place is an important thing in this purpose. Becasue going to new place, would defenitly change their views about the world and would make them think differently. Also, it is an opportunity to learn about different cultures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'monotones'' or 'monotone's'?
Suggestion: monotones'; monotone's
...ng various places, releases them from a monotones life and changes their perception about...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...for their outstanding education system. Thats why thousands of students move to there...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at unique opportunity for that reason. In conclustion, huma kind often prefer d...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, in fact, kind of, of course, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75584415584 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48466234577 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535064935065 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6263421759 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6086956522 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78260869565 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413419330974 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103544493237 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142025758236 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27918630717 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.210997122983 0.0645574589148 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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