To control the budget of one society which of following sectors can be reduced their budgets?
Police
libraries
public transportation
The significance of discovering some solutions to surmount the financial predicament ubiquitous in one society is not stealthy for anyone. What serves as a dilemma is how to fulfill this goal. Among a diversified constellation of perspectives, my penchant is more partial toward the belief that confining the budget related to the public transportation outweighs police or libraries. Since the libraries is intertwined with the knowledge and awareness of citizens which should not be ignored, additionally, police guarantee the security and regulations in one colony that cannot be underestimated. To demystify the hypothesis, two postulations can be proposed.
To converge on this theory, retaining the awareness and information of vast majority of the general public can be scrutinized cogently. Going into the depth, having extenuated the pertained budget of libraries, the government may deal with a plethora of problems in transmitting the concepts and issue to the denizens in near future. Simply stated, reducing the currency of libraries means weakening the ability of the libraries to purchase up-to- date source materials resulting in enlightening the individual more complicated. Based on one scientific research conducted in the psychological province, the less the persons access to new and wide range of information, the more the intricacy of orientating the persons will be predominant. Thus, there needs a balance and opting for libraries in order to apprise well-rounded individual and request them to put their heads together to find practical solutions to pass over the financial challenges.
Another angle to elucidate this thesis is elevating the condition of one colony with the help of police. To put general words, only when the citizens in one community feel a sense of safe and tranquilizing, do the persons become engross into other aspects of life such as promoting the health care , technologies or even public transportation. Faced with this fact, shrinking the budget of this section may leave a number of destructive and deleterious ramifications for whole the society. To shed more light, when the public transportation's budget is diminished, seldom can it propel both the government and citizens toward the adversity. Broadly speaking, here the role of police in enacting the law and ensuring the safety of each person in order to gravitate the colony toward a pinnacle of prosperity is remarkable.
Drawing upon the reasons, the benefits of decreasing the budget of transportation compared with libraries and police are too enormous to fathom. Not only do the government have a chance to utilize the knowledge of citizens to circumvent the financial deficit, but also it may not raze the security and serenity of persons by incarcerating the budget of police sectors.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, well, broadly speaking, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42045454545 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17766130643 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547727272727 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2547534007 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.294117647 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8823529412 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223668993037 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060646968558 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427342367401 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135523884731 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398125858785 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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