"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
The significance of lodging the important events such as historical or political aspects of the persons living in a current era to contribute the humans’ off springs is not stealthy for anyone. Among a diversified constellation of perspectives, some may regard the video as a potential device in this way prior than the inscription. Conversely, others persevere in unraveling the belief that nothing even the worst writing can be supplanted by the videos. After weighing the evidence, it is totally conspicuous that the text can provide tremendous privileges for our progenitor in their following years. (93)
Consider first the respect people hold for the videos far better than written records. To clarify, how can the authenticity and validation of the records be substantiated? Indeed, in spite of facilitating the recording of phenomena occurred surround the humans thanks to the videos compared with registering the event by words, the videos may subsume a surge of blemish and flaws which may directly effect on the opinions of the next generation, additionally, the repercussions of those videos may leave detrimental consequences on the decisions of the persons who will live in the future. Thus, how does one reach a result that videos prioritize than written words? (108)
To converge on the latter notion, the challenges of retaining the videos for a long period of time can be scrutinized cogently. To delineate, having been ephemeral and unstable, the videos cannot convey the accurate and the right information to the next generation. In contrast, the inscription can be preserved for a long time with little changes, hence, it will transmit as precise information as it should be, accordingly, the next generation can benefit from the text which is not compared with the videos. Thus, if the possibility of conserving one material as a critical source is not accessible, how will the other generations can interpret the issues based on nowadays in order to better predict the problems in the future time. In fact, the more the one is apprised about today, the less prevalence of hardships and obstacles will be observed tomorrow. (143)
The latter angle demystifying the verified thesis is encompassing the ability of implementing numerous references to affirm what is delivered to the humans’ children. To illuminate, only when one written document alluded to innumerable valid and trustable resources, can it be mentioned as an appropriate material to transfer the knowledge to other persons. However, it should be noted that seldom do the videos meet this kind of opportunity for scientists and scholars to investigate and analyze some events which are happening currently to anticipate the situation of tomorrow vigorously and correctly. As a result, here the predominance of the authenticity of written records in comparison with videos as objective resources can be thoroughly comprehended. (114)
As the bulk of the evidence demonstrates, the benefits of taking written records precedence over videos are too enormous to fathom. To recapitulate the reasons, not only does the next progenitor have a chance to utilize the valid data about the current, but also they may be predisposed to perennial documents durable (sturdy) for many years. (56)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...of blemish and flaws which may directly effect on the opinions of the next generation,...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...nges of retaining the videos for a long period of time can be scrutinized cogently. To delinea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, in contrast, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29118773946 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08203672871 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545977011494 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.8921699554 60.3974514979 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.1 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16647087915 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508641883619 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408050435247 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936503859303 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372729127391 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 176.0 100.480337079 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.