The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than writing records
The speaker asserts that video camera is more important form of documentation than written records because it provides more accurate and convincing recording of contemporary life. I agree that video recording provides an accurate and objective record; however, written records are also equally important in modern life and we use it more frequently than video recording under certain circumstances.
For the purpose of capturing different happy moments, national events, and live shows, I agree that video recording is more accurate and objective than written records. The video camera can be used to capture and replay happy moments of life such as birthday events, marriage ceremony and other auspicious occasions with the perfect memory which is not possible through written documents.
Furthermore, video recording can be a perfect witness under certain circumstances and plays an evidentiary role in legal proceedings. For instance, we can use video surveillance camera in department stores, jewelry shops, banks, book stores, and supermarkets to check human activities. Moreover, video recording can be used as perfect evidences while dealing with cases such as accidents, robbery, shoplifting, drug dealing traffic violations and so forth. Thus video recording provides an accurate account of the past events which is almost impossible through the written documents. Also, video camera can be used for the perfect recording of the natural disasters such as earthquake, hurricane, typhoons, flooding, landslide volcanic eruptions and so forth in an accurate way which is not possible through written documents.
Although video recording has many merits, written documents are also equally important in contemporary life. Under certain circumstances, written documents are more appropriate and advantageous than video recording. For instance, written documents are imperative in documenting statistical data and other quantitative explanations such as the total population of a particular city and the population distribution on the basis of age bar, sex, religion, caste etc, which can only be well documented by writing and is impossible by video recording. Similarly, it is impossible to make an accurate account of the total number of viewers, total number of tickets sold on the class basis and the total revenue garnered by the theatre in a particular day by simply analyzing the video recording of the viewers. For this, one should have to check the written records in the tickets.
Written documents are essential in everyday life from small business sales record to the large industries, government firms, banks, and hospitals. In hospitals, a written document is used at each and every place as a means of recording. The nurse keeps the written records of the condition of the patients each day such as fever, blood pressure, urine condition, medicines doses, respiration conditions and so forth. The same record facilitates the doctors to examine the general condition of the patients and improvement in health of the patients. More importantly, written documents are used in legal matters such as complex contractual agreements, legacy papers, banking transactions and etc. Similarly, written documents are equally important in keeping academic records and achievements and such types of documentations are not possible by video recordings.
In conclusion, both the video recording and the written documents have equal importance in making an accurate and convincing documentation of the contemporary life. The speaker simply overstates the importance of video recording over written documents
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Consider replacing "in an accurate way" with adverb for "accurate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3071.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63486238532 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00056611666 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445871559633 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 977.4 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3270699761 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.590909091 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7727272727 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517979404155 0.243740707755 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188835144049 0.0831039109588 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150082228145 0.0758088955206 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335494495878 0.150359130593 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161166560709 0.0667264976115 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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