"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
The speaker asserts that videos have become a more important form of documentation than written records because they are accurate and convincing. Admittedly, videos can be filmed easily and seem to be realistic, but I must point out that written records have some advantages over videos.
First of all, written records can convey one's emotions and thinking process, which is something that videos may not. When writting a testimony, one can explain what they were thinking when they did something, such as "when I saw this person, she reminded me of someone I met in college, so I got interested and wanted to get her attention," which can help us better understand why and how something happened. Videos, on the other hand, only show us what was happening on the surface and lack explainations.
In addition, written records allow writters to narrate what was going on, so they can tell us what they experienced. For example, one can describe what something smells like in written words, and if s/he is good at it, we can feel that through vivid descriptions. There are many more things we cannot know for sure from videos, such as feelings of cold and hot, numbness, moisture, etc. Therefore, written records convey information that is beyond visual.
However, I must concede that written records are not the perfect way of documentation: not everyone is a good writer; people may not be aware of something going on near them; people experience memory loss and tend to overstate and understate things. Videos clearly do much better in these aspects while, as mentioned earlier, written records out-perform videos in other aspects, so naturally the two of them work hand in hand, providing us two different and important perspectives.
In sum, I admit that videos are a very good way of documenting things, but written records also have huge advantages over videos in some aspects. Neither of them is perfect, so a combination of both may be a better choice of documentation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...irst of all, written records can convey ones emotions and thinking process, which is...
^^^^
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...terested and wanted to get her attention,' which can help us better understand wh...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02108433735 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82563353814 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572289156627 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1372697104 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.230769231 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 5.21951772744 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272528271027 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110138483706 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115689171853 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166218969535 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951047902581 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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