Directions: Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During the period between early 50’s to nearly the end of 70’s in China, the generations of young people who grew up with planned economy were hardly able to tell what is “Making own decisions”. “Most of us did not have the change to go to the further education after high school,” Yu shi, a witness of that era and a teacher in a university now, says, “We were assigned to a certain job base on the census register, and got marriage in early twenties by parents’ will.” This situation continued until early 80’s when the country had abandoned the old economy mechanism, and set up a new economic system – the market economy. The new-born generations, since then, had begun to deviate the conventional route of their own life. The causes are on the three counts: parents are more open-mind to their children, the improvements of their material life offered them the opportunities to risk, and the increase of knowledge and information expended their horizon and provided them more options.
To begin with, the parents, who were born and raised in a conventional society lacking of messages, usually lived in a limited social circle. There is a number of them did not realize that they could have another better choice until they had come into a middle age. A research indicates that at least 70 percent of them had regretful feelings about their decisions before. On account of that, they have the potential willing to avoid the dilemma snagging their children again, and would show more understanding when their children have their own plans.
Second, better financial conditions give young people less family burdens than their predecessors. In the past, young people always shouldered huge family responsibility, especially in China, when education source is limited, and the only kid who obtained education in formal schools or universities have to make livings for the whole family, which usually contained more than three people. In this case, the overwhelmed family burden gives young adults few choices to focus on what they desire to do, and they have to listen to their parents’ suggestion and follow what they were told to do.
Furthermore, nobody could overlook the fact that in the past, the level of public information in the societies was low; consequently, children were wrestling with lack of data. It goes without saying that since there were not universities enough or people could rarely travel; hence, obtaining experience was a complex procedure. The young were relying on their parents' experiences. Now it is believed that internet is ruling in all over the world. Everything you need from basic information about cooking an egg to the most complex scientific or social data are available on the internet. Such a great situation will assist the youths to gain their needed factors for making new decisions. Even more, human beings can connect with each other in every point of this modern world and share their opinions and experiences with each other.
By and large, young people can make more decisions about themselves today than a few decades ago. This is the favorable trend for the development of the whole society that benefit both parents and their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , &apos
... the further education after high school,' Yu shi, a witness of that era and a te...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orizon and provided them more options. To begin with, the parents, who were b...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
... until they had come into a middle age. A research indicates that at least 70 percent of t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n their children have their own plans. Second, better financial conditions give...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, if, look, second, so, then, at least, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2816.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24394785847 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24803954665 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562383612663 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.5620645102 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.095238095 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939104594517 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293816180611 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242663381089 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0487171117842 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337771844198 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.002688172 300% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.