Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Never have people the lack of celebrities around, which they are about pop stars, sports stars, performing stars, successful businesspeople, leading politicians and so forth. In such a connected world, celebrities may have immense amounts of potential to influence the human society, for they are exposed every day through advertisements, on television, on radio, and the internet; they are almost everywhere. Adults having full-developed mentality and intellect may have less possibility to emulate their behaviors for yet they have their own life value, critical thinking, and their own judgments. Whereas, when it comes to youth, the situation becomes a little out of control. The reasons may refer to: young people are more likely to be attracted by celebrities for their sensory acuity; and they have the trend to imitate celebrities actions, behaviors, and influenced by their words because of young people’s innocent and callow nature; and finally, young people do not have sufficient experience and horizon to judge whether his or her behaviors are proper. On account of those three reasons, it is truly important for people who already have fame to be cautious of their options.
Researches in some academic papers show that juveniles are more easily to be attracted by new or uncommon objects which they never met before, and that might contribute to the study mechanism which is in that age, brains are more likely to be stimulated by the outside source which they do not familiar with. Electronic cerebral scans depict that the frequency of brain activities goes up when researchers show the young volunteers a clip of bizarre pets’ video or novel images including magazine covers with fashion celebrities; besides, the ratio is sound and more vibrant than it between adults. In this circumstance, with pieces of information associated with celebrities disseminated all around the place, children and adolescents have a more significant chance to pay attention to.
Emulating is a part of the study process too. What’s more, it helps young people forming the self-consciousness mentally by a couple of ways in which one of them is, comparison. Along with the influence by the environments they live, criticized or praised by their parents, peers or others, young people are starting to configure their own primary judgments such as good/bad, like/dislike, beauty and ugliness, etc. Consciously or unconsciously, they put themselves in a position to compare with celebrities who they are interested in, and then react with their own regularities. For instance, a girl might be fascinated by Lady Gaga for her bizarre, scantily clad costumes and bold makeup; the distinctiveness, this girl might think of, is so cool. In that case, she is starting to compare her dressing with Lady Gage's, then trying to dress more like her; those behaviors must be improper in her age from an adult’s view, but it is so natural and reasonable from a child perspective; they just want to be the same.
What they dress, what they use, what they eat, all of those are subconsciously conveyed by advertisements acted by celebrities and have influenced young people’s daily choices. Without relative knowledge, a child may be vulnerable to pick up an unhealthy diet for he or she might have seen too many candy advertisements, which could lead to a sugar obsession, or have seen too many magazines with too many images of an unrealistic thin ideal, which could link to anorexia. That is, young people do not have the completed experience and awareness of the consequences from the behaviors which they picked up, and when they or their parents realized, sometimes it is little too late. News are covered now and then with girls who die from malnutrition just for looking skinny like the idols.
Despite the negative effects, some celebrities influence the right discussion for the better. The singer Lorde called out a photoshopped image of herself on Twitter. She noted that one photo showed here with Perfect skin while the other was real. "Remember, flaws are ok." she tweeted. Good or bad, better or worse, no matter what the celebrities do, it needs to be grounded in how they inflict on our young culture, with meticulous and punctilious reactions. Furthermore, there is an equivalent significance it is all just a matter of who and what we focus on, for all of us, including adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, whereas, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 13.8261648746 253% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3710.0 1977.66487455 188% => OK
No of words: 718.0 407.700716846 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16713091922 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17643912491 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98079034342 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 375.0 212.727598566 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522284122563 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1145.7 618.680645161 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.0824896291 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.4 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.72 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142843193292 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421609604187 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323747014587 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088644390646 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242785042368 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 190.0 86.8835125448 219% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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