Do you agree disagree with the following statement? The most important thing the government can do to keep people healthy is to clean the environment.
Nowadays, it is easier that people lived longer and healthier than before. Some people may state that the most important thing that the government can keep people healthy is to clean the environment, while others argue that there are other things to help people keep healthy. In my opinion, I disagree that cleaning the environment is the only way to keep people state healthy for some reasons.
First of all, constructing hospitals is a crucial way to improve people’s lives. For example, there is some countryside lack of hospital building. Through developing more hospitals, people who live in the inconvenient places can still get complete treatment as soon as possible. Furthermore, the locals don not need to spread amount of money and time to transit from their hometown to big cities to find a better medical resource.
Second, government should improve the medical workers’ salary to attract more people to contribute in medical environment. To be specific, some public hospital has lack of nurses and doctors. I had a serious fever when I was an elementary student. When I entered the gate of the hospital, I saw lots of patients but there is only few nurses and doctors. They worked over than ten hours per day without rest. In addition, some patients are really rude for those workers. If the nurses and doctors are not enough anymore or the decide to strike to protest, no one will cure the patients especially the people who get injury.
Third, establishing a complete healthy insurance is more efficient than just cleaning the environment. To illustrate, our government provide national healthy insurance for all the citizens. Nevertheless, poor person may hard to be cured in some countries because they do not have insurance. Actually, public insurance not only help everyone get the medical resources but also distribute the resources in every city as well.
Definitely, some people may state that cleaning the environment can help people stay healthy. However, it is a negative way because government have to hire lots of people to clean the environment and it will pollute the future, it is an inefficient way and a waste of money. To conclude, there are lots of factors to help people keep healthy instead of just cleaning environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 528, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...s and doctors are not enough anymore or the decide to strike to protest, no one will cure ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, third, well, while, for example, in addition, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10666666667 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78402554267 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517333333333 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.627917963 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1904761905 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2380952381 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273338997269 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715464818659 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917842829589 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153925274945 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113863020753 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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