Do you agree or disagree computer games is waste of time and children should not be allowed to play

Game perception has changed with the advent of the technology. Virtual games, which provide gamers with various opportunities to enjoy unreal experiences, today, are one of the most enjoyable inside activities played by most people from young to old. Since computer games present a different kind of virtual experiences, people tend to spend hours in front of the computer. Those who are most interested in playing these games are children. Some people consider playing those games as a waste of time for children whereas others strongly support the idea that computer games have different benefits for them. I, however, am of the opinion that computer games make many contributions to young brains.

To begin with, as we all know, children need to enjoy more than adults. They want to experience everything they see but, their parents may not be able to afford to provide them with many opportunities because of the high expenses of those activities. According to me, the best way in order to satisfy them is computer games. For example, they can fly with warplanes or become a Special Forces soldier fighting with enemies thanks to those games. What I am saying is that they already spend many times by doing useless activities so; since they may gratify themselves by them, they should not be considered a waste of time.

In addition, computer games help children to improve their foreign language skills, especially English. In order to chat with other players on the online games, they should have an average command of written English. Moreover, the language of the most computer games is in English and playing them improves children's foreign language skills. For example, I was fond of race games such as Need for Speed or Forza and playing these games provided me to get used the terms of the automobile in English. By this way, I can easily read the automobile magazines in English.

Last but not least, it improves children's brain-body coordination. Studies show that engaging in activities requiring the use of body and brain, some computer games are really useful for children. What is more, some educationalists suggest playing strategy and simulation games to improve analytic thinking. Take me as an example. When I was a child, I would play Sim City, in which I had to manage the whole city and follow every situation. This provided me to think versatile and concentrate on more things at the same time.

To put it in a nutshell, I strongly believe that the advantages of the computer games overweigh their disadvantages and are not a waste of time. They help children to derive more pleasure from life, to learn a foreign language in an easy and enjoyable way, and develop their analytic thinking.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
... the high expenses of those activities. According to me, the best way in order to satisfy them ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, whereas, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9693654267 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64121127746 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507658643326 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5538874057 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.625 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0416666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286047867529 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826839818679 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659950032104 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16039456198 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361583659616 0.0645574589148 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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