Do you agree or disagree with the following opinion? It is necessary for high school students to do household work after school because this can give them a sense of responsibility.
Responsibility is one of the most important morality of a person. From my perspective, it is essential for high school students to do household work after school to get a sense of responsibility.
First of all, every student is a part of a family so as a family member, it is their duty to help their parents do some household work which can provide them responsibility. Doing housework is a participated activity with their parents. During the whole process, teenagers will figure out how to do the housework well and how to cooperate with other people. Being responsible is very vital for students in their future careers. Imagine this, a youth is asked to do some group work after he entering a new company, however, he knows clearly about how to get along well with his colleagues and how to finish these tasks well because of his responsibility. There is no doubt that this man will get a promotion within a short time.
Second, high school students have to be responsible not just in their families but also in the society. They may make a few mistakes while they are doing the housework. For example, they might break a bowl or plate while washing dishes. Besides, they might mix the white T-shirt and the black jean together while doing laundry. Nevertheless , it does not matter if teenagers admit their mistakes and correct the mistakes right away. Because these are good lessons to teach students to be responsible which they can not learn from school. Therefore, when these students grow up, they will be responsible for their own mistakes and take actions to correct the mistakes. In this way, the society will become better because everyone taking their responsibility for each other and for this society.
As time goes by, these high school students will realize that they have learned responsibility gradually through doing household work even they did not intend to do so. Accordingly, students are supposed to do some housework to gain a sense of responsibility after school.
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89675516224 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77379451044 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1510768359 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2222222222 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358500352808 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118896550443 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108857895426 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269222401155 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792744963438 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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