Although educators have been putting a lot of effort in understanding the goal of education, there are still debates on whether or not, the goal of education lie in helping students to educate themselves. In my point of view, I strongly disagree with this opinion.
Have you ever heard your teacher said the goal of education is to help people to educate themselves? On the surface, the idea sounds extremely convincing. However, it is an excuse made by some teachers who can’t deliver knowledge and skills effectively. Many educators don’t have passion in teaching young individuals, and they use this notion as a way to stay lazy. For example, some math teachers never impart knowledge in class, but ask students to read the textbooks by themselves. As a result, students end up with poor academic performance.
Since the world has been changing dramatically, it is barely possible to learn new knowledge without other’s assistance. Therefore, the goal of education is not about educating oneself, but about gaining knowledge efficiently in order to keep up with the drastically changing world. For example, more and more computer software are developed nowadays, young individuals are required to learn new computer skills, which can’t be done on their own. As a result, the goal of education lies in imparting new skills effectively rather than help students to educate themselves.
Finally, in addition to gaining skills and knowledge, developing emotional well-being also plays an important role in educating the student. The most important goal of education is to help students have the empathy for human being, express their opinions and feeling, and offer love and care for those who are suffering. Guidance from adults or educators is important for cultivating young individuals to become confident and develop healthy well-being. Compared to educating themselves, psychological success is far more important than educating oneself.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that helping people to educate themselves is just a lie. The goal of education lies in keeping up with the cutting-edge technologies and developing confident individuals not educating themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...f education, there are still debates on whether or not, the goal of education lie in helping s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48093841642 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03217865203 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542521994135 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2740611312 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406287577255 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136037238937 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114417034512 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255700173451 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630466303148 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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