Do you agree or disagree with the following ?People should learn foreign language in their country or live in the country of the targeted language
Nowadays, people choose to learn languages in a convenient way.The question is whether people should learn language in their own territory or they should inhabit the country of the targeted language.Personal, I think the best way to learn is to move down to the state of the language originator.My decision is based on the following reasons, which I will develop in my body paragraphs.
To begin with, learning a foreign language in the targeted country prevents us from being lonely and isolated .More importantly, we can always express ourselves better and form deeper connections with the natives speakers around us.Whereas, when we chose to learn in our own environment, we are more likely to be alone since it is a second language and as a result, we might feel depressed and sad.My sister’s experience is a good illustration of this.My sister stayed in Germany for two years in order to learn deutsch and she was able to form a deeper relationships with the people around.In fact, she never felt isolated since the people around her also communicate in deutsch.Eventually she was happy she made a lot of friends at the time she was there. In contrast ,If she had chosen to learn deutsch in Nigeria , obviously she would be depressed because people around her won’t be able to speak the language and as a result, she would be sad.
On top of that , when we learn a second language in the targeted country where the language is spoken, we are more likely to secure jobs with foreign companies.To explain broadly, these days a lot of companies prefer to employ people who can communicate with different languages.However, getting a job might be difficult if one choose to learn a second language in one’s territory because foreigners hardly set up businesses outside their comfort zones.Coming from my previous example, while my sister was learning deutsch, she was opportuned to work with one of the biggest plastic companies in Germany.Although their customers were mixtures of Nigerian and German, she never had any issues because she could speak both languages effectively.On the other hand, if she had stayed in Nigeria to learn deutsch, she wouldn’t have been able to work with foreigners as most foreign people don’t set up their businesses in Nigeria.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I think the best way to learn a language is to move to the targeted country.This is because it makes it easier to speak the language fluently, and also increases one’s chance of working with foreigners.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, whereas, while, i think, in contrast, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01187648456 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97558091583 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482185273159 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 84.0 20.1344086022 417% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 293.674922321 48.9658058833 600% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 422.0 100.406767564 420% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 84.2 20.6045352989 409% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 27.8 5.45110844103 510% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336093611486 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207581036859 0.076458572812 271% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954969903987 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23944209919 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783864112364 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.3 11.7677419355 376% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -5.32 58.1214874552 -9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 10.1575268817 344% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.65 8.01818996416 133% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 10.002688172 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.6 10.0537634409 354% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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