Do you agree or disagree with following sentence.Celebrating pets in an holiday would be funny to me.

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Do you agree or disagree with following sentence.

Celebrating pets in an holiday would be funny to me.

All of the world, people celebrate all kinds of special days and events as holidays. For example, countries such as Mexico, the United States, and France celebrate their independence day on a designated day during the year. On this day, the stores close, families get together to spend time, and there may even be a fireworks show in the evening time in cities in these respective countries. Other holidays such as Christmas and Thanksgiving, both of which are celebrated in the United States, are additional holidays set aside for families and friends. There are already so many holidays in my country that I enjoy, so choosing to create a new holiday is no easy task. If I had to choose a new holiday, I would choose one to celebrate my dog. In its honor, I would have a giant cake, a dog theme park, and a royal parade.

First of all, my own holiday for my dog would involve a giant cake. In fact, I would invite my neighbors and friends to celebrate with me by bringing their pets. The crown jewel of the festivity would be a giant cake which would be approximately 20 pounds in weight, circular shaped, and 2 feet tall. To make the cake appealing to my dog Lucky, I would use cornmeal, chicken, bacon, salt, and flour. In a similar manner to my dog, which I believe is the cutest animal in the world, I would make the cake as beautiful as possible.

Second of all, in the holiday for my dog Lucky, I would create a theme park in the backyard of my house. The theme park would include things that dogs like. For example, I would place a red fire hydrant along with a patch of grass so all the dogs coming to the party would have a proper place to "go to the bathroom." In addition, I would create a play area with sand with some plastic and rubber dog toys such as bones and balls. Lucky loves to chew things, so she and the other dogs would have things to chew on as we celebrate this wonderful holiday.

Finally, what is a holiday without a parade? Of course, to celebrate this holiday, I would have a royal parade for my dog Lucky. I truly love her, and she is my favorite pet in the whole world, so the parade would be a great way for me to show my love and appreciation for my dog. During the parade, all those invited to celebrate this holiday would dress up their dogs in play clothes that best represented the pets' personalities. We would walk down our neighborhood street with our pets on leashes with a marching band to honor the love that we have for our pets.

As crazy as it may sound, if I had to create a new holiday, I would create one to honor my dog. Moreover, this holiday could spread from my house to other homes, other cities, and other countries, and maybe people over all the world would be able to celebrate their pets in a similar manner. In fact, the last Saturday in April in the United States is National Pet Day. For me, I choose to celebrate that day in honor of my dog with a yummy dog-appealing cake, a theme park, and a parade

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
All of the world, people celebrate all kinds of sp...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "In a similar manner" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nmeal, chicken, bacon, salt, and flour. In a similar manner to my dog, which I believe is the cutes...
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Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar manner" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...d would be able to celebrate their pets in a similar manner. In fact, the last Saturday in April in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, for example, in addition, in fact, of course, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34347048301 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43137907895 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427549194991 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0764854997 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.12 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.36 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228047852212 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839439439284 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397440562069 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162718879468 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231342924034 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 10.9000537634 75% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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