Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The ability to maintaining friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to many new friends easily.
It is undeniable that friendship is essential thing in people's lives. Usually, there are two type of people, one that prefers maintaining friendships with small number of friends over a long period of time, and the other one likes to make many new friends easily. In considering which case is better, I think keeping friendships with older friends is more important for happiness than having the ability to make new friends.
first, friendships are about collecting memories. when the time passes, there will be more memories to remember between friends. For example, I have a group of five friends from my high school. they are more like sisters than friends. I used to play, eat and study with them. we almost share every thing togather. this year is our 10th year to gather, so I am planning to make a movie of our memories to celebrate our friendship. Surprisingly, I discover that we have an album with at least one thousand images for each year.
Second, good friend is who support your dreams. However, new friends will not have a strong connection to support any of your dreams. Bake to my friends group, when I was at the end of my medical school and I was trying to choose between completing my speciality or to stop studying because of financial issues, my friends came to me with the first simester fee and they told me that I have to complete my dream. In addition to that, they found a job offer for me to be able to pay for next simester. For me, this incident touched my heart and made our relation stronger.
To sum up, I believe that maintaining a friendship over along period of time is more important not only because of all memories that we can collect, but also friends become a family over the years, moreover they share sadness and happiness togather. Consequently, if we choose our friends carefully, we will keep them as friends forever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, at least, for example, i think, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65757575758 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5679185527 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554545454545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5942384447 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3888888889 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308627827514 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880217350541 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893348664776 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208679966303 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144833958486 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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