Truth be told, studying at university as soon as the the high school is completed has generated numerous controversies these days. Some people contend that students should start their academic program at university immidiately after complering high school. Others hold the view that students can allocate some time to other activities like traveling or work before starting their proffesional program. I consider myself in the latter group and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, when students attend some workplaces before pursuing their study, they have the chance to get familiar with work atmosphere and its requirements. It would have a profound impact on their insight and enhance their ability to select the best major that fits them. To clarify, take a personal experience as an example: when I wanted to participate in the universities' programs, I was so confused which major is the best choice for me. I was ambivilant about pursuing my study as a mechanical engineer. Thus, I decided to work as an intern in a petrochemical company to be able to investigate the pros and cons of this job position. After working for about one year, I found that this work is not intriguing for me, and thus, I changed my mind about the major. Now, I am studying health science at university and I am euphoric about my decision. If I had not experienced workplace of a mechanical engineer, I would have made a mistake that had decisive impact on my future. Hence, It is crucial to allocate time to work to enhance our knowledge before starting academic program at university.
Secondly, traveling and working pave the way for students to experience numerous situations that would have a prominent influence on them. By traveling to new cities, students can widen their insight, get familier with diverse cultures, and even find job positions. For instance, one of my friends, named Sara, decided to go to China after completation of high school. In China, she went to a restaurant that served a special food. She realized that this food was very delicious and she tried to learn the recepi of the food. After she came back, she opened a chinees erestuarant, and now, she is exceedingly prosperous, and infact, this travel made her a rich girl. Thus, traveling would help students to find their interests and talents.
To sum up, taking into account what was already mentioned, I believe that travel and work not only would help students to understand about their inherent talents but also would help them to make a rational decision about the best major for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Suggestion: the; the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9271070615 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75363115254 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523917995444 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2628216128 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22583971683 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067367596354 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571226421284 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138100412078 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678294860231 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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