Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The year after high school has a substantial impact on the students' life. I believe the students should begin their studies at university immediately after they have finished high school. Otherwise, they will lose there precious days doing nothing. Moreover, if they take a year off after high school, they will forget what they have learned in school, which in turn will significantly undermine the effectiveness of higher education.
To begin with, I genuinely think the young adult most not waste their invaluable days. What they do in those days will have a direct impact on how their future will form. Because of that, they need to plan their days after highschool painstakingly and thoroughly. I can recall an experience that is a compelling example of how I wasted my time and faced the consequences of my neglect. When I have finished my high school, I traveled for eight months, while my friends started their bachelor's program at the university. After a few months, I felt depressed and alone. I always was thinking that I am left behind, which was true. Because of the travels, I was not able to get a good job. As a result, I was stuck with my debts, which I did not know how to pay them off.
Furthermore, I consider a long break after the highschool dangerous. You can potentially forget what you have learned in the school years, or struggle to remember the essential details of the academic subjects you knew previously. For instance, the time I graduated from high school, I was incredibly good at math. Unfortunately, by the time I finished my travels, I could not recall even the most rudimentary methods to solve an equation. It took me another year of golden days to reeducate myself on the maths in order to get admitted to a university. That year I struggle even harder with math than the time I first learned the topics. Additionally, it was mentally a tiresome task to re-read the same material once I was fluent.
To conclude, I consider the year after the high school a life-changing moment that should not be wasted with unimportant activities; it will have many consequences on their future. High school graduate should pursue their university education right after high school. If not so, they will feel left behind, and a return would be costly considering their time and energy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... school has a substantial impact on the students life. I believe the students should beg...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 570, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...w months, I felt depressed and alone. I always was thinking that I am left behind, which w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to even'
Suggestion: to even
...d to a university. That year I struggle even harder with math than the time I first ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79949874687 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77179838979 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498746867168 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7690899199 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2608695652 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.347826087 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69565217391 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257276800809 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769928157404 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787808702804 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174876476301 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866064639963 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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