Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For any business to be successful, it must spend a lot of money on advertising.
Once a product is famous, the company can gain lots of profit and expand its scale. That is the reason why many companies try to increase their brand awareness, whereas, I am of the opinion that it is not a proper way to spend a lot of money on advertising for promoting the products. I feel this way for two reasons, which will be explored in the following essay.
To begin with, although advertising is a good way to build popularity, there are more factors for the success of business besides advertising. Additionally, when consumers decide if they would buy a product, they would consider many aspects, such as quality, service, reputation, and integrity. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was shopping in a makeup shop, I was attracted by an advertisement, which is about a foundation. I saw a woman put the foundation on her face and then her face became so smooth, I even could not see any of her pores. In the end, I bought one. I found, however, it was not as useful as the advertisement had shown. Further, some red rashes started coming up on my face. Afterward, I checked the reviews about the brand, and I found plenty of complaints about the brand, apparently, this company is notorious. In short, as my tragic experience, I realized that I should not believe an advertisement completely, even the video or picture was made perfectly.
Moreover, there is not only an advertising department in a company, the expenses of a company is huge. In addition, using too much money on advertising would reduce the budget of other departments, and make other results. It may make the quality of products lower or make capital turnover not work. For instance, when I had a part-time job in a computer company, I received a lot of complaining e-mails and calls about the crush from overheat. This company is terrible for everything but its advertising since the executor paid lots of attention to marketing activities, therefore, there is no enough budget to hire more technical staff to fix the issue of heat sinks. Thus, enterprise resource planning is important, also companies should plan how to use the money in an appropriate way.
In conclusion, only spending a lot of money on advertising will not lead an enterprise to success. Since if the product is not as good as the advertisement has shown, it only will cause negative effects. Besides this, it is important to manage all of the expenses of a company thoughtfully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 702, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... sinks. Thus, it is important to manage all of the expenses thoughtfully. In conclusion...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...panies should plan how to use the money in an appropriate way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in short, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78125 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95051233986 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543269230769 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6521971615 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.45 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195999647481 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553289028546 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650545772687 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128684106085 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427716120564 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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