Thinking about being successful in businesses, people pay a lot of attention to advertisements. In this regard, some people believe that a considerable amount of money should be spent on advertising, if people want to be successful in their works. I, however, have enough reasons to object to this point of view. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, being successful in businesses is inextricably linked to the quality of products, so there is no need to allocate a vast amount of money to advertisements. To put it in a more vivid picture, nowadays, people have to work really hard to make two ends meet, so they tend to purchase high-quality products. There is popular belief which says “I do not have enough money to buy cheap things.” It is due to the fact that, people think that they do not have to pay a lot of money for inexpensive objects since they do not have enough quality. As a result, products’ quality is the best advertisement for every business. As a way of illustration, take Kalleh. It produces dairy products such as yogurt, ice cream and so on. Although that company does not pay a lot of money for advertisement, it is very successful not only in my country, but also in Asia and some part of Europe.
Secondly, after providing primitive needs for businesses, people can invest their extra money in advertisement, which means there are some other factors which are more important than advertisement to be successful in any business. As a matter of fact, businesses should have many infrastructures to achieve their purpose, and those things are more significant than advertisement. Should businessman want to be successful, they have to hire a number of experts in their fields. In addition, a lot of labor with different skills should be recruited in order to do distinctive types of works and so on. Therefore, those factors are more essential for a great accomplishment. Thus, the more money people assign to advertisements, the less money they can allocate to those fundamental factors. Take my previous example, for illustration. Kalleh is a chain factory in the Iran, and it has about five thousand workers. The manager of that company tries really hard to make its facilities up to date as soon as possible, which makes Kalleh the most successful company in our region. As a result, these factors can pave the road of success more easily than spending a great deal of money on advertisements.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that a small amount of money should be used for advertisement, if people want to be successful in their businesses. Not only, can people allocate that amount of money to the quality of their products, but also, they can provide their fundamental needs for their businesses.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, i mean, in addition, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87211740042 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02387047662 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46750524109 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2256714154 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.043478261 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7391304348 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95652173913 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256869069538 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722770426244 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550827371521 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164414618699 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322026647008 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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