Do you give money to charitable organizations do you prefer to choose how the donation will be used donate money on food or service or leave the decision to the organization

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Do you give money to charitable organizations, do you prefer to choose how the donation will be used (donate money on food or service) or leave the decision to the organization?

Nobody can deny the role of charities in every society as they have always been a shelter for poor people who cannot satisfy their requirements easily. In this regard, some people believe that individuals who donate money to charity should select how that money will be used, while I have enough reasons to object to this point of view. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, charitable organizations have a considerable amount of classified information of people who cannot meet their families’ supplies, so they can make better decisions about how donations should be used. To put it in a more vivid picture, poor people often go to charities in order to let them know that they need help, and those organizations collect poor people’s information to allocate money to them in the future. As a result, they have access to a huge bank of data with which they can find deserve people easily. As a way of illustration, take Mahak. It is a charity in my country which bestow money to families with children who are suffering from cancer. The Mahak has collected a lot of information about those children from all around of my country. Thereby, it will be better if individuals leave the decision, how donations should be used, to the Mahak.
Secondly, charitable organizations can come to a better decision about how donations should be used as there are a number of experts in those organizations who can contemplate that subject from distinctive viewpoints; whereas, I cannot consider it from different points of view, also I cannot be objective since I am too close to the subject. As a result, it is more likely that I assign that amount of money to some things that are not appropriate. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by own experience. Although the charity to which I donate some money told me that I should not allocate my money to a soccer team, I selected it in order to get that amount of money. It was due to the fact that I did not regard that matter from disparate aspects. After making that decision, I understood that it did not really need money, which made me so upset. Consequently, had I let the charity to make decisions about my donation, I would have been happier since they could perceive that subject from different views.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that people should let charities make the decision about how donations should be used. Given that, Not only, do they have access to a vast amount of information, but also they can consider it from different aspects, and they are more objective than individuals.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 521, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...f data with which they can find deserve people easily. As a way of illustration, take ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, i mean, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74403470716 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73985861093 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446854663774 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6090938304 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.105263158 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225733526403 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696707314474 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705251645197 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146016473568 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353559095969 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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