For hundreds of years, people have never stopped debating this fascinating question. Letting children play computer game is a very crucial and critical task of their life since this decision-making has a profound impact on their future. Regarding this issue, some people believe that parents should permit children to play computer games while some others disagree and claim that playing computer games is so detrimental for children. From my point of view, I think the second idea carries more weight. I will enlarge on what I mean in this essay.
Above all, although playing computer game can be considered as a good thing for spare time, it is more likely to result in a number of diseases. To put it into perspective, when children want to play it, they have to be immobile for a long period of time. Immobility will lead to obesity, which is the origin of many diseases such as heart attack and diabetes. Take my cousin, for example. He is a fifteen-year-old son who spends about seven hours a day on playing computer games, that is why he is about 110 kilograms and has diabetes.
The other reason which deserves some words here is that there are a lot of computer games which are inappropriate for children ages. To be more exact, children are in the early stages of their lives that is why some games are not suitable for them. For instance GTA is a popular game among children, which includes many violent scenes. Children love to play that game, though it has an age label which demonstrates that this game is not appropriate for children. As a result, children should not be allowed to play it.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that playing computer game can lead to bad grades in children’s lessons. As parents should work too hard to make ends meet, they cannot be with children all the time. So, children will spend a considerable amount of time on computer games, if parents let them do it. My nephew is a compelling example of that. As he got good grades last year, his father bought a PS4 for him. But it has had a bad effect on his grades and he gets bad marks this year.
To sum up, given the fact that computer games have bad impact on children’s health and grades in school. In addition, it may include a lot of inappropriate scenes. As a result, I personally presume that parents should not let them play computer games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...it, they have to be immobile for a long period of time. Immobility will lead to obesity, which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62411347518 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53514328439 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505910165485 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6830979623 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372586582863 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108548440699 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103729276771 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223428826708 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265937811114 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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