One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up to date skills for workplace For solving this government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills Do you think it is an effective way

Governments’ budgets have always played an important role in societies’ development, and how they should be spent is the most significant decision which should be made by policy makers. In this regard, some people believe that money should not be invested in adults’ training who are older than 25 your; however I have enough reasons to object to this point of view, and I will illustrate two of which in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, spending money on training course for adults over the age 25 can lead to learning new skills with which companies can increase their productivity, and the more productivities companies have, the more income government has. To put it in a more vivid picture, in the fast paced world of today, people need to be cognizant of new methods in order to solve different new problems which are likely to happen in every factory. Thus, they have to collect a considerable amount of new information in different fields to be useful for their companies. In addition, having more skillful workers, companies can increase their productivity rapidly. As a result, they can export more goods, which means governments can achieve more taxes. Therefore, take all these processes into account, governments will make a huge profit, should they allocate enough money to train adults older than 25 years old. Take my hometown company, Kalleh, for instance. Our governments spend a great deal of money to send Kalleh’s managers to Russia to learn new methods of producing dairy products. When they return, the rate of Kalleh’s productions and its export increase markedly. So, government makes a huge profit from rising revenue from taxes.
Secondly, it seems plausible that some people did not have enough money to continue their education, even if they were so talented; so, when governments assign money to adults training, some gifted people will be discovered, which can be very beneficial for governments. To clarify this point, nowadays, people have to work really hard to make ends meet, so it is likely that they cannot overcome the expenses of education. Thereby, a number of genius people should go to work instead of following their talent. Under this circumstance, governments funding can save them from doing the same old things, and they will be able to pursue their interests. As a result, a lot of those people will be able to run their own businesses, which is a great benefit for every government since they can enhance countries’ condition by hiring a lot of workers, or finding new things.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that, governments should allocate budgets to adults over the age of 25 training course since it is really effective for them. It is due to the fact that, not only will governments income soar by getting more taxes because of more export, but also they will have a number entrepreneurs who can improve countries’ situations.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02464065708 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7563352742 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515400410678 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9637189407 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.789473684 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6315789474 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227141658445 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737596932656 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628212581744 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144951181173 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436665422601 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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