Movies and televisions have always had huge impacts on every human community. In regard to this issue, although it seems plausible at first glimpse that different types of programs should be shown by TV during which sometimes are bad characters rewarded even if they have committed crimes, I would counter this point of view. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, awarding good people can motivate others to follow in their footsteps, as TV has a mass audience, it should always play films in which those who have done their duties very well receive rewards. To be more exact, people almost always tend to do what is correct correspond to their belief. One method with which TV can bring about changes in people’s belief is showing programs which give prizes to good people who deserve it due to their great works. In that case, societies will be a better place to live because others try to imitate good people to be appreciated. As a way of illustration, take Asre Jadid which is a TV show in my country. Not only are good people’s work shown during the program, but also a great deal of money is awarded to the best one. As this program started its works, my neighbors, who used to only gather and smoke, have tried to make a masterpiece to show it in that program.
Secondly, when criminals are faced with their consequences or punishments during a movie because their bad works, it can be a good message for people to understand that real society does not tolerate crimes, too. As a matter of fact, from the dawn of civilization, punishments have always been an inseparable part of communities since they can prohibit bad people from committing crimes. People will figure out that they must avoid doing bad things provided that this punishment is shown on TV. This is especially true of children who are more susceptible to this issue. A number of scientific studies have reported that children, who watch characters in movies and on television who commit crimes and are not sorry for their actions and do not face consequences tend to find it normal and may accept more violence in societies.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that rewarding good people and punishing bad one should be shown in films and TV, given the fact that, the former can encourage people to do good things and the latter can prevent them from committing crimes.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i mean, as a matter of fact, in regard to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73571428571 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55902099159 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538095238095 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9735414978 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.3125 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357832653736 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114280473658 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727899336105 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21848732303 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524038777845 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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