Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take courses in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.)
Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons.
Spending time during breaks between semesters has always been a pleasure thought for individuals. In this regard, some people believe that taking some irrelevant courses during breaks can be a great choice, while some others prefer to attend in volunteer works in their hometown or other places. I personally suppose that doing volunteer works to enhance different aspects of community’s daily life is superior to participate in classes connected to students’ major indirectly. I will enlarge on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, students can kill two birds with one stone by selecting volunteer works as their assignment for their break time. To put it in more vivid picture, not only do volunteer works help society, but also they can help students to be ready for their future careers. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. Some trips during the summer break were contemplated as volunteer works by my previous university. I used to be involved in those trips one of which was held in my hometown and we had to teach students living in a small poor village. The first benefit of that trip was for students who live in that village since they learned several lessons, which have made them literate. In addition, the second advantage of that was experience which I have earned by teaching those students and I am using it nowadays in my profession.
Secondly, since students will not be able to use an irrelevant course in their real lives, taking such courses is a sheer waste of time. To clarify this point, almost always do students opt their major according to their interests, which motivates them to implement their courses as well as possible. Whereas they do not pay enough attention to a course, if it is not connected to their major directly. Consequently, that course will be so detrimental that they desperately want to put an end to it since it can ruin students’ break totally.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that volunteer works in society are preferable to selecting irrelevant courses. Given the fact that it is beneficial for both community and students, also taking courses with no connection to students’ major is a complete waste of time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, as for, in addition, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94255874674 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75735569898 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527415143603 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0347878208 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.352941176 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302681705456 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992838811673 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486515768465 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184418721869 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285200596067 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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