One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government to spend its money?
The issue of whether the government should devote financial support to train adults the most up- to- date skills aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked would agree with the statement that allocating financial support for training people up-to-date skills is useful for society, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am in agreement with the latter group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first vital point to be mentioned is that this scheme needs a large amount of money which is not wise in this critical situation of my country. In recent years our country confronts enormous serious issues like poverty which has influenced people’s lives considerably. According to the latest statistic results, approximately half of the population are suffering from absolute poverty which results in many problems such as malnutrition and escalating the rate of many diseases. As a result, dealing with this issue should be the most priority. If the government want to allocate budget for some unnecessary plans, there would not remain sufficient money for this essential purpose. For instance, the government should spend monetary aid every month to every family. This money would help them to pay for basic needs like healthy food and their health insurance to cope with these unwanted problems.
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that training the employees is their company or organization where they are work. in fact, if these companies want to make more profit they should pay the expenses and this issue has not related to the government. In this competitive world, most of the enterprise know about the important of up-dating their worker's skills, due to this, they force employees to engage in workshops to be trained by specialists the latest knowledge and skills.
If the government is concern about this issue, they can establish some potent rules to push all employers to send their workers to the workshops to be taught up-to-date skills, with this approach government does not need spending any money toward this issue.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that the government should consider this budget for solving vital problems like poverty. Moreover, nowadays, companies know about the importance of up-dating in their field, therefore, the government does not need to support this plan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18588235294 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68669823479 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531764705882 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5075141773 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.647058824 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245905741295 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778577605111 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609977522247 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144914482869 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283708681506 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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