People encounter a variety of problems in current society, such as acquiring the most up-to-date abilities, saving more money for the future, and other critical demands for lives. Some of the problems are required to be solved by the government. However, I disagree with the idea that it’s an effective way for the government to invest the money in training courses. My reasons are as follow.
To begin with, the government should not provide such courses because the training courses provided by companies are more effective. The companies usually know which kinds of abilities are critical to the job market. For example, I took a web development course that is provided by the government, but I found that the techniques were deprecated. The technique even required students to manually write html-related code, which makes developing large website extremely difficult. Hence, I chose another course that was offered by a company. I had learned the most up-to-date knowledge about web design and the most efficient approaches to build a website. In the end, I’m able to implement a website effortlessly.
Secondly, the government should spend the budget in other urgent condition because the government’s budget is limited. The training courses are not necessary for the government to provide, the government should focus on offering more essential services that benefit most citizens. For example, I used to live in a small town in Changhua county. The public transportation service there were scarce; as a result, citizens who don’t have cars or motorcycles need to spend one hour going to the nearest bus station. Last year, the local government decided to add another bus station near the town. Therefore, the citizens no longer spend hours in order to take a bus. If the government had chosen to provide the training courses in the town, those courses would have not improve peoples’ lives.
To conclude, providing training courses are not necessarily offered by the government. First, the content of the courses provided by the government might not be the most up-to-date; on the other hand, the companies may offer even more effective courses. Secondly, the government’s budget is limited, and it should be spend on more essential requirement such as public transportation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
..., and other critical demands for lives. Some of the problems are required to be solved by t...
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Line 1, column 383, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...ney in training courses. My reasons are as follow. To begin with, the government shoul...
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Line 6, column 769, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'improved'.
Suggestion: improved
... the town, those courses would have not improve peoples’ lives. To conclude, provid...
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Line 8, column 318, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
...t’s budget is limited, and it should be spend on more essential requirement such as p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26902173913 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8861395006 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51902173913 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6854651472 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5238095238 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253882494556 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712860693299 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628717051486 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165031299592 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465660709421 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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