People obey some rules in society for the sake of the order. Some people may argue the rules limit the freedom and young people should not follow such rules. However, I'm a firm believer that young people should follow the rules because young people can be protected from danger and obeying the regulations sometimes benefits the society. My reasons are as follows.
First of all, young people can be protected because rules prevent young people from threats. Once the young people obey the rules, they can grow without being harmed. For example, students are required to return home immediately after school. The rule sounds unreasonable in the first place because it limits students' freedom. However, if young students stay outside, they are exposed to potential danger. My cousin, Janice, is a elementary school student. Last month, her classmates asked if she wanted to hang out with them in a distant playground after school, but Janice rejected the appointment. After she returned home, she received a news that the classmates were kidnapped by strangers in the playground. Fortunately, the classmates were rescued in the end. If they had returned home right after school, they wouldn't have encounter such danger.
Secondly, rules also assist young people to cultivate good habits in society because the regulations allows young people to learn the appropriate behaviors. If people learn and obey the behaviors, those behavior would benefit to the sociey. For example, I was asked to stay quiet in subways when I was a child. Although I didn't realize the reason why I must stay silent when taking subways, I still obey the rule. After I grown up, I discover this regulations benefits the sourroundings because there are many employees who work hard and feel extremely fatigue after work. As a result, keep quiet in such places creates opportunities for tired workers to take a rest.
To sum up, I hold the belief that the rules are not too strict for young people to follow and obey. First, those rules protect young people from potential threats. Secondly, some regulations benefit to the society if everyone learns and obeys them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, as a result, first of all, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06497175141 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49443345927 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528248587571 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3397640321 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9565217391 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3913043478 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345722223094 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106960553174 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122757835032 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271296667894 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13130043845 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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