Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Agree or disagree

We are surrounded by movies and televisions in modern society. Some people argue that movies and televisions cause negative effects on young people's behavior. On the other hand, I'm a firm believer that television and movies benefits to young people's actions because they can relax themselves and make friends. My reasons are as follows.

First of all, young people can release their stress by watching movies or television because they can totally be involved in the scenes of the programs, and forget about nuisances in life. For example, I occasionally felt stressed in college because I had to do my assignment, conduct research, and prepare for the exams at the same time. Once I felt extremely stressed, I always turned on the television and watch TV series called "Modern family". The content of each episode was entertaining which allows me to forget the annoyance at school; moreover, the show assist me to release my stress by laughing. As a result, I was always refreshed after watching the TV series.

Secondly, children or teenagers can expand their network through watching movies or television because such activity provide topics for young people to share their ideas together. Furthermore, young people can make new friends. For example, I was attracted by Japanese animate, Pokemon, when I studied in elementary school. Because I was a transfer student and new to the school, I didn't have a friend in the beginning. One day, I made a friend by asking him if he had watched Pokemon. Soon, we had become best friends in school, we share our opinions of each episode. Even after graduating from the elementary school for over ten years, we still keep in touch and share the experiences in life.

To sum up, I hold the belief that movies and televisions benefits young people instead of causing negative effects. Firstly, young people can release their negative pressure by watching movies or televisions. Additionally, young people can expend their social network by sharing the ideas about the movies or television programs.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10979228487 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74058701968 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528189910979 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3417777126 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6315789474 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7368421053 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227611136026 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818645738857 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991734097099 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174778707714 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108465126977 0.0645574589148 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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