Undoubtedly, having a decent job in this modern era is faced with lots of challenges since every career needs employees to meet various skills and potentials. In this regard, whether the government should be involved and provide general skill training courses for adults or not is a matter of debate. Personally, I believe that government should not spend money on this matter and the budget could be allocated to other sectors effectively for the reasons I am about to elaborate on in the following.
To begin with, given the extent of jobs and careers today are available in society, it is neither practical nor economic to plan and coordinate a general platform to train adult workers skills required to fulfill job positions. The emergent of the internet reshaped the world as it introduces many new jobs and positions that haven’t existed before the technology era. Even today that we are in the middle of the Internet age, every day, due to the requirement of the international technology market, new jobs are being defined and recruiting people. As a result, establishing a unique and ubiquitous framework through which workers can get the proper training to adapt the skill necessary for any job is not feasible and it also will exhaust a considerable amount of state budgets in order to such plan be operational in a nationwide scale. Consequently, I believe that if government concerns about the competency of the workforce should remedy this problem form stem. That is to say, it is better to plan a comprehensive framework to establish a modern education system that is able to nurture creativity and resiliency in children. Doing so, children learn from the beginning to adapt themselves to ever-changing demands, which is conducive to their future prosperity.
Moreover, I think it is a general trend that most companies and firms have their own procedure regarding the employment which includes a number of tests and probation periods, so certificate that has been issued to people out of their institution has less priority in this matter. To elaborate on this, my personal experience would be a perfect example. Last year, when I just graduated from university, I attended several independent vocational training programs that my senior friends told me that are conducive to land better job opportunities and find a decent job related to my major. After a whole year that I participate in such courses and get certificates, I applied for several vacancies. When I was invited to have an interview with the hiring manager of one company, to my astonishment, he didn’t mention my training degrees and he just simply told me that I had to spend a probation period with internal education courses. So this experience clearly shows that all of those certificates did not have any positive impact on my hiring process since the company strictly followed its own recruitment agenda.
To sum up, given all the point and examples mentioned above, I believe assigning state budget to train work-related skills for adults is not a smart choice and it could be put in better use. This is because of the ever-changing nature of jobs and the advent of new positions and also because most companies do not heed state issues certificates since they have predefined procedures for recruitment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... predefined procedures for recruitment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, regarding, so, i think, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2764.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05301645338 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93448887027 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526508226691 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 885.6 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.4103407472 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.555555556 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3888888889 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239280170255 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707456824192 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463995907169 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154368650962 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465552174328 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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