TPO 25 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, youngsters as an important part of each community have been expected to devote sufficient time to the improvement of their society. A controversial question, which is often raised in this regard is that whether youths nowadays do not give enough time to assisting their communities in comparison to the past. While some people are inclined towards the idea that the commitment of young people to improving their community reduce significantly in recent decades, others, on the other hand, are against this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that nowadays, youngsters do not give enough contribution to their communities. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that in today's hectic life, young people lead a busy life compared to the past which prevents them to allocate sufficient time for the betterment of their communities. In contrast to the past, young people have countless responsibilities that need to be fulfilled, it has taken a large amount of their daily time. They are busy with their education, career, and other burdens of life. Therefore, this has a negative influence on their contribution to their communities. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year I enthusiastically enrolled in volunteering in training homeless people about hygiene, however, due to the backbreaking tasks at work I was obliged to cancel this important contribution.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that technology has penetrated every facet of people including youngsters. After a long day of work and study, they generally prefer to spend their leisure time surfing the web and using social media. As scientifically proven, using the Internet is addictive, as a result, in spare time the first option coming to their mind to spend their time is using the Internet and its attractive program rather than participating in activities for improvement of their community.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, it is undeniable fact that young people do not tend to dedicate their time to community service. The first reason behind this tendency is the hustle and bustle of daily life which takes a considerable amount of their time. Moreover, using the Internet for free time is a barrier to their contribution to their community.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14536340852 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02774734325 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511278195489 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1767477665 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.764705882 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292047564242 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971094838883 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050565762876 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188475951876 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529686804979 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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