TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex
From the dawn of humanities, jobs have been played a significant role in people's lives. There is a wide range of approaches toward getting a job including getting a secure job rather than wait for a more satisfying one. While some people might have a negative attitude towards this opinion, I am of the opinion that the advantages of getting a secure job far outweigh. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that by a secure job people can earn a living in this competitive job market. Nowadays due to the substantial increase in the population of the world, most countries have been confronting with the economic crisis such as recession and lack of sufficient job for their people, particularly for youngsters. This condition has been resulted in the unemployment rate go up in the last centuries which has caused many people to live below the poverty line. Therefore, getting a secure job is definitely reasonable to secure income and guarantee improving standard living for families. For instance, a friend of mine is always proud of himself as an idealist person who does not give up on finding his favorable job in spite of the many opportunities he has received during recent years. However, he is always broke up at the end of the month as he has to borrow money from his family because of unemployment.
Another noteworthy reason is that getting a job even one we cannot interested in provides us some valuable opportunities in the future. Employees can gain firsthand knowledge and experience in the workplace that would benefit them in upcoming opportunities. In recent years, employers have realized how important work experience is, thus, one of the most requirements for many occupations including a satisfying job is work experience. Consequently, getting a job even uninteresting would benefit people to stand out among their competitors in the future. My experience is a compelling example of this. Last year I could succeed to get an extremely competitive job position that other applicants had either the same or better resume, the only reason that distinguished me from rivals was my work experience.
From what has been mentioned above, I can conclude that people should prioritize getting the job rather than waiting for the ideal and satisfying job. A secure job not only benefits people by providing them enough income for improving their life standard but also work experience is an invaluable part of it that will aid them in their future opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92356277107 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53596287703 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9426246026 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.722222222 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9444444444 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313249186771 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106407679049 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083314453354 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212231661567 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473281342918 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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