Undoubtedly, having a decent job in this modern era is faced with lot of challenges since every career need employees to meet various skill and potentials. In this regard, whether government should be involved and provide general skill training courses for adults or not is a matter of debate. Personally, I believe that government should not spend money on this matter and the budget could be allocated to other sectors effectively for the reasons I am about to elaborate on in the following.
To begin with, given the extent of jobs and careers today are available in society, it is neither practical nor economic to plan and coordinate a general platform to educate adult workers skills required to fulfill job positions. The emergent of the internet reshaped the world as it introduces many new jobs and positions that haven’t existed before the technology era. Even today that we are in the middle of the Internet age, every day, due to the requirement of international technology market, new jobs are being defined and recruiting people. As a result, establishing a unique and ubiquitous framework through which worker can get proper training to adapt skill necessary for any job is not feasible and it also will exhaust considerable amount of state budgets in order to be operational in nationwide scale. Consequently, I believe that if government concerns about the competency of workforce should remedy this problem form stem. That is to say, it is better to plan a comprehensive framework to establish a modern education system that is able to nurture creativity and resiliency in children. Doing so, children learn from the beginning to adapt themselves with ever changing demands it is conducive to their future prosperity.
Moreover, I think it is a general trend that most companies and firms have their own procedure regarding the employment which includes number of tests and probation work experience, so certificate that has been issued to people out of their institution have less priority to the in this matter. To elaborate on this, my personal experience would be a perfect example. Last year, when I just graduated from university, I attended several independent vocational training programs which my senior friends told me that are conducive to land better job opportunities and find a decent job related to my major. After a whole year that I participate in such courses and get certificates, I applied for several vacancies. When I was invited to have an interview with the hiring manager of one company, to my astonishment, he didn’t mention to my training degrees and he just simply told that I had to spend a probation period with internal educations course. So this experience clearly shows that, all of those certificates did not have positive impact in y hiring process, since the company strictly followed its own recruitment agenda.
To sum up, given all the point and examples mentioned in the above, I believe assigning state budget to train work-related skill for adults is not a smart choice and it could be put in better use. This is because of the ever changing nature of jobs and advent of new positions and also because most companies do not heed state issues certificates since they have predefined procedure for recruitment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e predefined procedure for recruitment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, regarding, so, i think, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06642066421 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90658282941 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542435424354 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 883.8 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.338264084 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.555555556 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1111111111 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240368857808 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706679457893 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471137656699 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155083475788 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461512241644 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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