TPO 51 Writing IntegratedHumans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have mad

The reading and the lecture are about common beliefs about certain elephants' behavior. The author of the reading provides three common beliefs. The lecturer challenges the points put forth by the author. She is of the opinions that beliefs mentioned in the passage stem from misinterpretation of elephants' behaviors.
To begin with, the author argues that elderly elephants are aware of their decease. The article mentions that old elephants can sense when dying approaches and they separate from the herd to go near the water to die alone, as this is proved by the abundance of elephant's skeleton discovered near bodies of water. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that it should not be assumed that elephants are conscious of their death. She further explains that this behavior is simply because the old elephants' teeth became weak and they have to find softer vegetation to eat, which is founded near the water. Additionally, she says that elderly elephants graze near the water until they die.
Secondly, the writer suggests that elephants have the ability to depict the surrounding world through painting. In the article it is said that elephants can be instructed to paint objects like flower or even themselves. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by mentioning that trainers teach elephants to draw these shapes and, in fact, elephants are not aware of what they are really drawing. She elaborates on this by bringing up the point that instructors devised a training method by touching elephants' ears to learn them stroking on canvas. Through repetitive touches elephants draw just simple paint lines to create objects.
Finally, the author posits that it is a long-held belief that elephants are afraid of mice. Moreover, in the article it is stated that in a scientific experiment, introducing mice in the habitat of elephants caused these huge creatures to avoid the areas that mice are presented. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that this point is clearly misinterpreted. She notes that the reasons that elephants avoid mice is that mice are unfamiliar to elephants, so elephants behave, naturally, in such way that they have been posed to a threat. She says that in environments like zoos, elephants are familiar with mice and do not mind them.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'elephants'' or 'elephant's'?
Suggestion: elephants'; elephant's
... are about common beliefs about certain elephants behavior. The author of the reading pro...
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Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... reading provides three common beliefs. The lecturer challenges the points put fort...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, in contrast, in fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 12.0772626932 190% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 22.412803532 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1373.03311258 140% => OK
No of words: 376.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1170212766 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69285559471 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 145.348785872 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521276595745 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 419.366225166 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5060820929 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111988643539 0.272083759551 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365643000859 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344346803235 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0660949245119 0.162205337803 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027325250881 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 63.6247240618 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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