Establishing an effective education system in which students have the opportunity to maximize their productivity has always been a crucial issue in societies. In this regard, authorities have proposed new approaches to perfect the basic education for younger students, generally ones who are below 12 years old. Some believe that using several tutors to teach pupils aged 12 or younger is beneficial to improve their learning process. However, others positively disagree with this notion. Personally Speaking, I am in accord with the latter and the following are the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
To begin with, in lower grades, students need to establish an emotional connection with their teachers to learn better, and one teacher, throughout the year, has enough time to cultivate this friendship. Psychologists believe that since children in early education are new to the school environment and they have not experienced other communities than their homes, they need to create a sentimental connection with their teacher to fill the emotional gap resulting from being away of their family. Only after such friendship has shaped, pupils are willing to attentively heed to teacher’s sayings. Although the assimilation process is important, it is a time-consuming process and demands the teacher to spend many hours with students to break the ice. Having mentioned this, it is clear that getting acquainted with several teachers takes much more time than knowing one, which makes it impossible in the course of a school year.
Furthermore, in primary schools, courses are mostly general knowledge, thus they do not need certain levels of expertise and can be taught by one teacher. Besides, as each teacher might have his unique approach in teaching, young students might get confused about which method they have to follow. Consequently, this confusion leads to frustration affecting their learning adversely. To put it more vividly, consider the following example. When I was an eight-year-old student my teacher got sick in the middle of the year and she could not attend school for almost three months. Her replacement was a good teacher but he started to teach us some of the materials we had learned, including the multiplication table, in different ways. Having memorized the table with our teacher’s method, it was hard for us to adapt ourselves to the new approach. Finally, when our teacher recuperated and came back to class she was astonished because we constantly made mistakes in delivering the right answers to the products of numbers that she asked. As we wanted to answer with the old method, it created inconsistency in our minds. This example shows how different teaching approaches bring about a learning disorder in young Pupils.
To sum up, I strongly disagree with the idea that pupils below 12 years old should be taught by different teachers, this is because establishing an emotional bond with their teacher is a prerequisite for learning better, and because having different instructors teaching same contents negatively affects the learning consistency in their minds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...connection with their teachers to learn better, and one teacher, throughout the year, ...
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Line 4, column 642, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...good teacher but he started to teach us some of the materials we had learned, including the...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... teacher is a prerequisite for learning better, and because having different instructo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32591093117 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91542183445 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558704453441 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4079731731 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5238095238 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18645126391 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524386229449 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427456434827 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120967967145 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00733910020944 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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