The influence of family, particularly parents, on the decision making process of the young generation in recent decades has always been an interesting topic for a lively discussion. In this regard, people’s opinions are often categorized in two mutually exclusive views. While some people believe that in the past, juveniles were more reliant on their parents to make decisions for them than in the present, others hold the opposite view. Personally speaking, I am more inclined to the former view and the following are the reasons to substantiate my standpoint.
To begin with, today the young generation is equipped with variety of avenues to attain a score of useful information that could be utilized to take thoughtful decisions on their lives without depending to the family. To be more specific, juveniles today have easy access to the internet and they can gather data on almost every possible topics that concerns them. In addition, as society communications becomes more sophisticated and intertwined, consultant agenices have emerged in recent years offering counseling services in economic, legal, and social affairs and young individuals, being aware of the adavantages of such institutions, effectively consult with them about any issue that might affect their lives. In contrast, young souls in the past were in short supply of the modern assistive means and the only reliable source of information ,with which they had most of their interactions, was the family, exclusively their parents. Only due to the parents’ experience on life matters, the youth entrusted them with the right of decision making for their lives.
Furthermore, due to the better economic conditions, nowadays young individuals can find a job more conveniently than their peers in the past,as soons as they reach the legal age,thus experiencing financial independence which leads them to develop a self-sustaining character. In other words, being independent from family means that youngsters feel less obliged to let their parents take charge of crucial decisions of their lives. on the other hand, in the past, most juveniles had to run the family business along with their fathers. Although this partly assisted them with the financial issues, it did not guaranteed the independence of economic and subsequently the complete autonomy in the life. Consequently, the youngsters were somehow compelled to depend on their parents to make decisions for them since they had not developed a self-reliant personality.
To sum up, I strongly agree that ,contrary to the present, young people were too reliant on their parents regarding their lives’ decisions. This is because, they did not were in possession of aiding means that the present generation takes advantage of. Also, due to the financial dependence to the family, they had not a complete autonomy to make their decisions by their owns.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, regarding, so, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, in short, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35745614035 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94403708847 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537280701754 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.322231623 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.705882353 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8235294118 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405987091829 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133273466921 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807790732295 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260067403304 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174269902786 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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