In many places, students aged 12-18 are typically taught different subjects by different teachers, while
younger students are usually taught by only one teacher all day long. Some people believe it would also
benefit younger students to be taught by several different teachers everyday. Do you agree with this
view? Why or why not?
We are living in a sophisticated age which education has a profound impact on individual’s life. People are always trying to make their children lives more successful, delightful and purposeful. Some people believe that younger children should to be taught by several teachers like the children who aged 12-18, while others are convinced that on teacher should teach the younger students. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, undoubtedly, younger children have a vulnerable personality and their personality are influenced by everything which there are around them. As a matter of fact, one teacher is able to control and recognize them better because he/she spends most of his/her time with them. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous prosperous students having on children when they were under 12 years old. Although student miss this opportunity which enable them to become familiar with various teaching styles, what results from having on teacher is to enhance their abilities and also take the responsibility of what they do because their teacher is able to identify their weakness and eliminate them. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that the high percentage of student who have one teacher, are ones who could attend the prestigious university because their teacher find their interest encourage them to follow them properly
The second reason why i agree with it is that, obviously, we should not compare the student who age 12-18 with the student who are younger. Since students who age 12-18 are supposed to attend the society in the near future, it is better to them become familiar with different teaching styles. Furthermore, having several different teachers provide an opportunity for them to learn how to interact with different people. The modern world offers abundant examples of people could be prosperous in their lives and education due to having several teachers. Hence, if I were to be a determiner in our country, I would have forced the Educational System to hire one teacher of student who are under the age of 12. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this “the more student have one teacher when they are younger, the more they would concentrate on their issues”. Because having different teacher may distract them what is true or what is false.
TO make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of having one teacher on younger students. Not only are they able to find their interest better, but also they will be successful in the future. For this reason, I highly recommended that parent enroll their children in the school where one teacher teach their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, well, while, in addition, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13043478261 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69680320682 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7953407092 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.421052632 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27602512252 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882307289659 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064197590617 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169325268807 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727814719874 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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