Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the
following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time?
Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
-Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument
We are living in a sophisticated age which media have as a profound impact on our hectic life. People are always trying to make their lives more comfortable, successful and delightful. Some people believe that media care about the accuracy of facts, while others are convinced that media present incorrect information about news stories. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, obviously, the atmosphere of the media are so competitive and they always are trying to attract people through any way. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous media such as magazine and newspapers are closed due to spreading false news. Seldom are they able to stay in this competitive atmosphere by telling correct news. Although some type of media always try to show accurate news, what results from increasing media are to spreading false facts and people can not understand which of them are correct. For example, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that, approximately eighty percentage of old people who aged higher 50, are one saying the past media were more trustable. As a result, what I am certain is that due to increasing population, all type of media want to attract people through any way.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, undoubtedly, advertising is the most important way of gaining of revenue for the media. In fact, If you notice the media, you regard the most part of media are advertising. Hence, speeding false facts the best way to attract people to see their advertising. The modern world offers abundant example of the media which obtain a great deal of money by advertising. do people see the past, they notice due to lack of advertising the accuracy of new were more. Thus, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have established a center checking the accuracy of the information before spreading of them. In addition to aforementioned note, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this “the more there are media, the more they would attract people by presenting incorrect news".
To make a long stroy short, no one can deny the enormous negative effect of media on our lives. Not only do they want to stay in this competitive atmosphere, but also they want to gain money by attracting people through advertising. For this reason, I highly recommended that people notice more about the accuracy of news
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 82, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...f the media are so competitive and they always are trying to attract people through any wa...
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Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Seldom' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: Are Seldom
...are closed due to spreading false news. Seldom are they able to stay in this competitive a...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Do
...n a great deal of money by advertising. do people see the past, they notice due to...
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Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ng the accuracy of new were more. Thus, were I be a determiner in our country, I wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74025320058 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493181818182 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9173141374 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.714285714 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153310942021 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537229271184 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299319143349 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108132917486 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285459012579 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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