Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should
choose a job that is similar to what their parents did
The answer to this question can be differed from person to person. While some people believe that young people should choose a job like what their parents did, others hold exactly opposite viewpoint. I strongly agree with latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, so influential have interests been that they have had a great number of positive effects of on people's lives from around the world, yet above all, they have helped people to follow their goals based on what they are interested in. As a matter of fact, nowadays, young people are educating according to what they like and education provides a great opportunity for them to keep their incentive in reaching their goals. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous prosperous people who continued their education to follow their interests. For example, my father had a large grocery store and he had forced my brother to continue his career after his retirement, but my brother was interested in music. After a lot of conversation among them, my father imposed his opinion on my bother, and finally he had accepted my father's opinion resulting in since my brother did not any interest in that job, he failed. For this reason, had my father not imposed his opinion, my brother would have followed his interests and become successful.
The second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that if young people choose their parents job, they will not have any problem to find a job, and also they can start their independent life without any problem, yet one the other hand, some people are convinced that young people are supposed to attend the society in the near future and they should take the responsibility of something to become prosperous in their lives. In fact, if they make their lives by themselves, they will be successful in their lives. For this reason, I strongly agree with the latter idea, for I do believe that the more the experience independent lives, the more they will be responsible man. By way of illustration, based on the intelligible result which conducted in our country, approximately 90 percentage of successful businessmen are the ones starting their business based on themselves and did not choose their parent career.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of choosing a job which are toward of the parent’s job on young lives. Not only are they able to follow their interests, but also they can be successful in the future due to having valuable experience. Thus, I highly recommend that parent allow their children to choose their job by themselves
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, in fact, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88913043478 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59574593815 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469565217391 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.4107505014 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.294117647 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0588235294 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274330782415 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986517037988 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741531990121 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189955649893 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342266866875 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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